I enjoyed this very much - very creative, and I could visualise the Doctor as I read.
But can I recommend the community dw_britglish? There were a few instances where I was jerked out of the story by things which didn't fit the setting. For instance, in the UK healthcare is free at the point of use, so there would be no bill (unless Donna is in a private hospital, and I didn't get the impression at all that she was). Second, you don't tend to find volunteers giving directions and so on in British hospitals. There's an information desk, all right, but it's a permanent fixture rather than a table in a corner (as I've seen in North American hospitals) and operated by a hospital staff member.
(I'm not sure, too, given the way libraries are staffed in the UK, whether they would use temping agencies for staff vacancies; they'd probably more likely pull someone in from elsewhere in the Library Service, but someone more familiar with the libraries than I am could comment). Finally, we say 'mobile', not 'cellphone'.
As I said, I did very much enjoy this, other than the couple of minor things highlighted above.
But can I recommend the community dw_britglish? There were a few instances where I was jerked out of the story by things which didn't fit the setting. For instance, in the UK healthcare is free at the point of use, so there would be no bill (unless Donna is in a private hospital, and I didn't get the impression at all that she was). Second, you don't tend to find volunteers giving directions and so on in British hospitals. There's an information desk, all right, but it's a permanent fixture rather than a table in a corner (as I've seen in North American hospitals) and operated by a hospital staff member.
(I'm not sure, too, given the way libraries are staffed in the UK, whether they would use temping agencies for staff vacancies; they'd probably more likely pull someone in from elsewhere in the Library Service, but someone more familiar with the libraries than I am could comment). Finally, we say 'mobile', not 'cellphone'.
As I said, I did very much enjoy this, other than the couple of minor things highlighted above.
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Actually, I appreciate the comm recommendation. There's only so much I can pester my British flistians with those kinds of questions.
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