Eeek!
So I have this thing I've been working on for the last few days and I'm pretty sure it's just about ready to be submitted for consideration. (I finally beat it down to 4000 words exactly, which is good because I discovered that there was a fair amount of junk that needed to come out. Plus it made me tighten up the beginning so that it was a lot less scattered, which is good.)
Thing is, I've been looking at it so long that I have no idea if it sucks or not. So. It'd be awesome if someone wanted to Beta it for me and give me some concrit on it. Stuff I know I have problems with: switching tenses midstream, transpositions (niether instead of neither, for example, though spellcheck usually takes care of that), occasional obscurity with personal pronouns.
The piece is het (I know!), involves a threesome and BDSM themes (nothing horrible, though, because I believe it's possible to be into BDSM and be ridiculously nice and sweet. Me? Idealistic and naive? Why do you ask?), and is not terribly explicit. It's also in first-person, which is not my favorite nor my strongest point-of-view. I'd send it to my mom if I could, but... Yeah, that's just not gonna happen.
So if you'd like to take a look, drop me a line or leave a comment. And I know that concrit is not a personal attack, because it just isn't. "Try a different adjective here." is not "You suck and I hate you DIAF PLZKTHX."
Thing is, I've been looking at it so long that I have no idea if it sucks or not. So. It'd be awesome if someone wanted to Beta it for me and give me some concrit on it. Stuff I know I have problems with: switching tenses midstream, transpositions (niether instead of neither, for example, though spellcheck usually takes care of that), occasional obscurity with personal pronouns.
The piece is het (I know!), involves a threesome and BDSM themes (nothing horrible, though, because I believe it's possible to be into BDSM and be ridiculously nice and sweet. Me? Idealistic and naive? Why do you ask?), and is not terribly explicit. It's also in first-person, which is not my favorite nor my strongest point-of-view. I'd send it to my mom if I could, but... Yeah, that's just not gonna happen.
So if you'd like to take a look, drop me a line or leave a comment. And I know that concrit is not a personal attack, because it just isn't. "Try a different adjective here." is not "You suck and I hate you DIAF PLZKTHX."