probably not technically fluff, but close enough.

[misscora]

Have finally succeded in writing H/D with a *happy* ending. Is sweet

This is the first draft. Comments and so on greatly appreciated, and loffed, and huggled, und so weiter.

As per usual in these things, I don't own HP, or DM, don't own Hogwarts. Draco's first 'offer' inspired by Jareth's in Labyrinth (an excellent movie). The orignal idea

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See?

[jlh]

You made Aja happy. That's more than I can do. (oh, my poor straight Harry, does no one love you?)

You're right, it isn't fluff, not really. It's more, sweet. Poor old Draco, he really has to hang in there, doesn't he? The structure is excellent; it works so, so well. Really, for a rough draft it's amazingly finished.

I liked what you said about if he goes to Harry before he's really changed within himself, he'll do it in a not-that-healthy way. It sort of makes the whole thing like a comedy of remarriage, doesn't it? They get together, and then they have to go off and make themselves into better people before they really can be together.

Discount this entirely because it probably doesn't go, but I'm wondering what Harry had to change in order to be able to accept Draco's offer? Maybe the flip side POV? I definitely reject that Draco is the only one who has to change the make the relationship work, and I'm sure you do as well. So the only thing I would say is that as it stands, only Draco changes, and Harry is a bit high and mighty about rejecting him. I guess my parallel would be, as usual, The Philadelphia Story. Dexter can be a little bit high and mighty toward Tracy to get her to change because he has already reformed himself--ie, he stopped drinking. I think that would give you some balance, but it may well have to be a companion fic, rather than occurring in this story. I really wouldn't want to burden this story with anything more as it is so superbly balanced within itself at the moment--wonderfully paced, as are all your stories.

Yay! No death!

--Clio, who can write the "little death" but not the big one

Re: See?

[misscora]

I had actually originally planned a companion that'd do exactly that, but I've got to refigure out the structure. My original thought was to do it in the same form only using the stages of something else, but the only thing I could come up with was the stages of failure (shock, fear, anger & blame, something, and dispair) and didn't fit *at* *all*. Am looking into it. Will come up with some way, hopefully soon.