Life: Jack's Story - part seven

[miss_shine]

Okay guys, part six was here- http://miss-shine.livejournal.com/2145.htmlRead more... )

Comments

[wenlyn530]

Wow, ok - the end part is sort of spooking me out. If this doesn't have a happy ending - I'm going to be very, very upset. But I will keep reading.

Don't really like Owen stories - all about the Janto!!!!

[miss_shine]

I know a lot of people don't like Owen stories, but I think he's quite interesting.

I'm using him to bridge the gap in between Jack's vision of events and Ianto's life after Jack so to speak, hope I'm not ruinning my story. Both Jack and Ianto's stories can be read as stand alones but it might help if you braved the murky waters of Owen's mind, it only for a little while.

[otp_alert]

Read through all the chapters in one go.
Well written story so far, the plot is great and love the suspense and angst. Ianto was such a bastard towards Jack and I'm happy that they made up. Wanted to hug Ianto when he told jack about the baby he lost with Lisa.
Even if Jack at times seems a bit OOC, that can be blamed on the pregnancy, but ya’ve managed to keep the others pretty much IC.

/“Owen will, he’s got a slide show,” said Tosh./ :lolz:

Talk about a cliffhanger. I hope that the team'll come to the rescue and that the baby's gonna be fine.
Looking forward to the next installment.

BTW, ya should post this to http://community.livejournal.com/jackxianto/ as well, it’s too good to go unnoticed by the fellow jato fans over there!

[miss_shine]

Wow, yeah I'll check that out, thanks for the comment and the info

[ivy_b]

Am I the first to comment? Cool. I loved these last two chapters- Bilis Manger coming in to ruin Jack's life (gotta love that) Ianto and Jack working out their differences, Owen saving the day and Rhys' reaction to Jack being pregnant, bless him.

I knew Bilis wouldn't give up so easily, even after his James Bond Villain act- give them time to save thsmselves and leave the room.

And now you've got Bilis stroking Jack's face and I REFUSE to think about Jack/Bilis but my mind works in kinky ways. Is Jack in the void? Oh dang, doesn't seem like he can get out on his own.

One thing-

"“Get yourself clear” Ianto told him.

“Okay” said Owen.

Is it meant to be the other way around? I'm pretty sure Ianto would be the one to get himself and Jack clear.

[miss_shine]

thanks I'm glad you liked it, no it was meant to be that way around. Owen had already told them to stand back and Ianto made sure that him and where clear. Ianto wanted to make just Owen got clear because if he got hurt he won't recover from it...being dead and all.

Thanks for asking thou, maybe I didn't make that point clear.

[felmyst]

another great part. I noticed a typo, u have weather for whether...I hope to see the next part soon...

[miss_shine]

Thanks for flagging the typo, I'm always doing that

[cen_evans]

OMG. I knew their escape was too good to be true. You're a genius, this is so fantastic, I'm running out of praise words to describe it...

[miss_shine]

thanks for the comment, I'm glad you liked it