{two} Sin S(e)oul

[minewsadvocate]

title: Sin S(e)oul
word count: 3452w
pairing: Onho, Jongkey
genre: crime, drama, action, romance
overall rating: NC-17
warning: Presence of violence, (consensual and not) sex, prostitution, gambling and mafia activities in general
summary: What happens when you become part of a powerful organization that could make you feel alive as much as dead? And

Comments

[hitoshisakurai]

/is late again
So many amazing things in this chapter, gosh >w< I absolutely love Key's & Nicole's friendship. It's so precious and they fit together so perfectly and I was spazzing hard while reading this chappie of yours ;3 I wonder who's her boyfriend tho... *tries to think of a guy that Key would like besides Jjong* hmm... Junho? X"D
This- "but he was also supposed to have a date with Jonghyun (a date for Kibum, a friendly hang out for the older boy)" is absolutely precious and so familiar... don't we all sometimes think this way when we get to hang out with our crush? Awwww ;w;
But, there's something sneaky about Jjong... and Jinki too.
I really like those short descriptions of the characters' past and how they show why they're now where they are. They're short but they fit perfectly.
And now, omg, Jinki... I don't know yet whether to love him madly or not, but, he is really intriguing. He seems to be cold, so unlike 'the Jinki' we're all used to, and that's such a fresh, unusal view on him. On the other hand tho we see he has emotions as well even if he tries not to show them too often. And, when he killed that guy... oh man. I always wonder what's inside such people's minds, I mean, how are they able to simply kill and not be that shattered about it... so, yeah, Jinki is freaking intriguing ;v; and I wonder what's his job to do... why he protected Minho and why he needs his little brother. Oh my.
And. Idk, is Jjong in some gang? Or Jjong and Minho are? Or waaaaaah I don't know yet (or maybe I have too many thoughts? x"D) but there must be something if Jjong says he doesn't want to date Kibum to not let 'this' happen to him.
Although a part of my JongKey shipper heart aches in here, it also swells in happiness, because it means that Jjong cares for him and wants to protect him. Which leads my heart to a really fast beating when I remember what happens in the prologue and I CAN'T WAIT. I JUST CAN'T WAIT FOR YOU TO CONTINUE AND I'M SORRY THIS COMMENT DOESN'T MAKE ANY SENSE.

[minewsadvocate]

hahaha One of the reasons why I didn't mention the name of Nicole's boyfriend is... I don't know who Kibum might like beside Jjong xD I don't even consider an option where Key likes someone else *is totally Jongkey biased*

As a matter of fact, I love Kibum and Nicole's friendship too that's why I wanted to include it ^^ Although I'm sure I didn't write about it that well (I think this chapter is a complete fail :/)

Yes Kibum has a high school crush on Jjong, that's for sure xD like... he doesn't care Jonghyun is involved in illegal activities.. in a way I wanted to make Kibum a little immature so that when he experiences when he will be experiencing (the prologue) he kinda realizes the world is much more than having a crush on someone..

Jinki is like the character I'm most worried about xD because... he is cold. When I first plotted this story I started asking around about Jinki's personality (because I had no idea about him really) and in the end I decided he would be a cold bastard xD a cold bastard that falls in love with Minho ;) So we will see what's gonna happen between them (even I don't know yet xD)

I think you will kill me soon anyway xD very soon.

Sorry for the late reply, I've had a bad period lately.... and the fact that I hate this chapter hasn't helped ;__;
Thank you for you always lovely comments <3

(anyway, I noticed you haven't accepted my request to follow you on twitter :( so I can't read your tweets yet)