FIC: Must Have Learned Them From A Million Stars [SG-1, Sam & Daniel, PG]
This fits into the Valentine 'verse, one of (at least) two stories that (will eventually) come before the Daniel/Vala/Cam arc, but unlike the stories already written, which fit necessarily together, this story can be read on its own. When I was working on this, I called it "the one about everything I know about Sam Carter".
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And I totally disagree with you about "how Daniel sees Sam" not being in there. Because it totally is. You do the same thing I do when you're writing tight third person limited like this; you have your viewpoint character make observations about the other character's actions, and then whatever spin the vp character puts on it doesn't matter, because the reader's formed her own impression. I totally have a strong and solid sense of what Daniel's thinking about Sam right here; it's hard to put into words, but it's sort of this hopeless love thing, where he loves her and respects her but he can't articulate it and he's painfully aware of all sorts of regrets that they both carry. The two of them have such a weird level of connection; they get some things without even thinking about it, and totally miss other things that might be totally obvious to someone else.
It really is one of the best things you've ever written, hon; not just for what it says, not just for how it says it, but for the way that it is this perfect polished jewel of exactly-the-right-amountness; there is not an excess word, and everything that is there contributes to the overall impression rather than distracting from it. It's certainly one of the best character pieces I've ever read.
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*clappy* that's EXACTLY it, exactly how i saw them in this story, and even how i see them reflected in parts of "sun-bleached history" -- i wanted to write something that would inform their conversation toward the end of that, and i think (i hope!) i've succeeded. so yay, thank you for that validation (and for the technical explanation of what i'm doing, because i'm very clear that it's what i do, especially in tight third person, but i don't know that i could have verbalized it.)
and thank you, again. just. you know what i mean. *hands*
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(and you are a very, very smart writer; you do things that are very right, and even if they're not conscious choice, you know how to listen to your story and your characters and take them in the right direction. it is a very, very valuable skill. how the hell do you not have a hundred comments on this story already? *flail*)
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