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the storms in july

Jul 20, 2011 01:49

Title: the storms in july
Author: fandrastic
Spoilers: up the S2 finale
Rating/Warnings: T for language
Word Count: 5,066
Disclaimer: the author owns nothing that the reader recognizes
A/N: first fic here! go easy on me :)

( he makes a show of dialing her number from memory. like it means something. it goes straight to voicemail. )

author: fandrastic, character: annie, fan: fiction, fan: fiction (completed), character: jeff

Comments 20

moony88 July 20 2011, 07:33:56 UTC

I love this! Hope you'll write the first day, I like the new Annie :)

fandrastic July 20 2011, 22:33:37 UTC

aww, thank you so much!
annie was a lot of fun to write, and while I do hope to continue this, I'm not sure when it'll happen.
hopefully soon, though! :)

shopgirl909 July 21 2011, 20:13:24 UTC

Yes please continue soon!!

My stomach is in knots (in the best way possible) and I cannot wait to read more.

aslkdhfalksjdf;ajsdf;laskjdf = what you have done to me.

ayleecambell July 20 2011, 13:02:39 UTC

This is your first fic? It was awesome!!! Loved the characterization and I'm really hoping your planning on writing more!!

fandrastic July 20 2011, 22:35:05 UTC

yeah, this was my first community fic, though I have been writing for a long time. but I'm so glad you liked it!
thanks for the compliments, they mean the world to me! :)

stephanierb July 20 2011, 14:46:51 UTC

This was outstanding. A very realistic look at what could be happening their summer away from Greendale.

The characterization was spot on. You've really captured Jeff and Annie, and I smiled when Abed 'Hmm' at everything Annie said. Too perfect.

I love how Annie goes from deciding to cut her hair to buying a new bag. Choosing something so drastic, then having her practical side take over is so HER. I really enjoyed how you approached her growth over the summer and how she went from drowning her sorrows in ice cream to getting decked out on her birthday, going to a bar and picking someone up. Annie's determination to deal and move on is one of the reasons I love her so much.

And I particularly enjoyed the way you handled Jeff and Annie's respective feelings for one another; Annie is open while Jeff is still in denial, though you're not so subtle that it isn't apparent. Jeff's reaction to learning about the kiss with Abed, the dismissal in Crate & Barrel and the ignored call were all moving.

At one point in their lives, ( ... )

fandrastic July 20 2011, 22:47:40 UTC

so I got this review today in the middle of my summer class, and reading it made my day. thank you SO MUCH for your lovely review, it honestly means so much to me ( ... )

stephanierb July 21 2011, 01:35:29 UTC

one of the things I was worried about was it seeming too out of character for annie to have a one night standIt's funny you should mention that specifically, because that was one of the few pieces that gave me pause. But after considering it, it didn't strike me as totally OOC. One of the benefits, I think, of writing summer fic is that writers have the luxury of taking the characters places they can't during the season because they have the time to develop them a bit on their own ( ... )

stephanierb July 21 2011, 01:44:04 UTC

Ugh, I need to read my comments before posting.

'And you wrote it in a way that was so fundamentally Annie in a way, particularly when she takes the napkin with her number on it' was just awful sentence construction. I'm not even sure what I was trying to say there. LOL

fangirl_101 July 20 2011, 14:59:23 UTC

This is really, really good. I love the tone you create and your style of writing. I can't believe this is your first J/A fic. You have their characterizations down really well. I love that Troy made a list of things Jeff and Britta are not allowed to do at Annie's 21st. That is so perfectly Troy.

I hope you write lots more J/A because you're really talented!!!

fandrastic July 20 2011, 22:52:11 UTC

aww, thank you so much! writing this was a lot of fun, and I credit this community and all the wonderful fic it provides for inspiring me!
troy was so much fun to write, and I wanted to write his few moments as funny, but not too much of the stereotypical 'troy cries and it's hilarious'.
hopefully I'll be struck with more inspiration to write more soon!
again, thanks for the lovely review! it's means a lot to me. :)

antinickname July 20 2011, 21:14:40 UTC

Can you PLEASE continue this? I really enjoyed it and I want to know what happens!

fandrastic July 20 2011, 22:53:32 UTC

the more I think about it, the more I'd really like to continue this fic, so I'm going to try and sketch something resembling a plan tonight. it's amazing to me how you readers have taken to this story--it's so much more than I expected!
thanks for the review, and the vote of confidence! :)