Jacob/Bella Big Bang fic: This Is The Night (Part 2)

[midnight_jo]

Title: This Is The Night (Part 2)
Author: midnight_jo
Artist: bluesuzanne
Disclaimer: I do not own Twilight (thank God), therefore I do not own Bella and Jacob.
Book: Eclipse-ish
Rating: G
Word Count: 15644
Character/Pairing(s): Jacob/Bella
Warnings: Mild language, some angst, Bella being Bella.
Summary: The night provides an escape for Bella, but it also brings

Comments

[nekobot01]

Yay!!! *applauds*

As much as I love Bella, I enjoy it when she gets called on her bullshit.

“Oh, like all of your decisions are so freaking intelligent,” she piped up, reaching out to shove his shoulder with her fingertips.

This was my favorite part. :)

And the letter... the goldfish bowl, Edward and his eternal trig classes... loved it. :)

[midnight_jo]

Yay!! I enjoy calling Bella out on her bullshit (see my other story Epiphany for more examples of Bella learning that the world doesn't revolve around her! Lol. I seem to enjoy writing that...)

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!! I'm so thrilled you liked it :)

[where_wolfe]

Oh, I loved a lot of this. The fact that Bella realizes how monotonous life as a vampire would be, the way Jacob doesn't just forgive her automatically, the entire thing about going on a trip together...

But I really loved that the letter was to Charlie from Renee. Hadn't been expecting that at the beginning (obviously) and how it tied in...well, yeah. Very nice.

[midnight_jo]

Thank you for the awesome comments! Yeah, I didn't want to have Jake just forgive her right away (like he frequently does in canon), because if you know what she did to him in "Breakdown", it would seem silly NOT to have him be pissed off about that.

I'm so glad that you didn't realize the letter was from Renee until the end. I accidentally spoiled the reveal on the artist-claiming post at the bellaxjacob_bb site, and I was hoping most people wouldn't have read that. I wanted it to be a surprise :) I'm so happy you liked the story! <3

-Jo

[marycontraire]

I didn't realize until the very end that the letter was actually to Charlie and not Edward. Which is probably not how you intended it. But that wound up breaking my heart more than anything else.

[midnight_jo]

Actually, I did intend for it to be ambiguous. I wanted the reader to think that maybe it was Bella's letter, and then have them draw the appropriate parallels. I hope at least that your heart wasn't broken enough to prevent you from enjoying the story! Thanks for reviewing :)

-Jo

comment 1

[bluesuzanne]

She also wouldn’t have to walk as far, because there’d be no need to worry about the engine's noise waking anyone up.

I love this little detail, because it highlights how much more comfortable life would be with Edward - how he really is the easy choice for Bella. Kind of reminds me of the big driving past the hotel in mine. Our brains ftw.

HAHAH it's quarter TO three. Bella and the cab driver are cute. Love. But I also love the way he seems perhaps more concerned with the trouble he could get into that what might happen to her. If he'd been TOO fatherly it would have made him a Mary Sue. As it is he feels very real and balanced. Kudos!

HAHAH you know, that 'taking this to my grave' part actually works perfectly. Because it's like he overhears the word 'Grave' and is all D:

You’d absolutely hate it where I’m going, anyway… I think I understand you well enough by now to know that there are few places in this world that fit you like Forks does.

Hee.

So, taking her cue from Jacob himself, she straightened her arm and, with a

Re: comment 1

[midnight_jo]

Your comments, from day-one, have always made me squee like a ridiculous teenage girl high on Zac Efron's hairspray fumes.

XDDDD

<3

comment 2

[bluesuzanne]

It’s like trying to imagine a goldfish jumping voluntarily from its bowl.

Ow, ow, ow. My heart.

CAN'T PACK FOR LITTLE LEAGUE HAHAH. And again, I think we're a bit twinsies, because this reminds me of 'aches' and then 'oh, pancakes' in mine.

GUHHHHHHHHHHH added convo/kiss works SO BEAUTIFULLY. I love it.

“I didn’t mean to… I mean… that wasn’t… I’m not even…” she stumbled over her words like a unfortunate slasher-movie victim barrelling through a dark forest - one that was completely overrun with convenient roots and stumps.

BAHAHAHAHAHA. omfg. Love.

Her fingers floated across the empty space to land right on top of his, right on the wheel, and she held them there, strong and sure. Settling back into her seat, she seemed to have to strain her arm to keep it outstretched, but she refused to let go; she needed him to know that she was in this with him, that they were doing this together, that this was them moving forward, not him helping her escape.

<3 <3 <3 <3 <3

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[midnight_jo]

I'm so, so, SO glad you liked it! I feel like you had almost as much invested in this mofo as I did! :)

And LOL! The whole "can't pack for little-league" thing was inspired by... well... me. I'm HORRIBLE when it comes to mishearing what people say, and then deciding that it's a good idea to repeat back what i THOUGHT I heard. It happens so often that my friends and I have a term for it, and I'll tell you the story behind it quickly:

One of the girls at my work was going out with her bf to a "really nice restaurant, you know... like suit-and-tie." Enter Jo: "Soup and Pie? That doesn't really sound all that fancy..."

So yes, I was delighted to be able to give Bella her very own "soup and pie moment" :)