Comments | michi_thekiller: Robert Burns wrote to a mouse

michi_thekiller

Robert Burns wrote to a mouse

Dec 06, 2006 00:57

Based on a true story. And everything else is made up. Warning: Long and completely unlike all my other pieces.

( The summer I was getting over being a junior in high school, John Steinbeck killed my best friend. )

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intravenusann December 6 2006, 06:30:37 UTC

I probably shouldn't have read this, but it was really good.

michichu2 December 6 2006, 06:51:20 UTC

Oh God, I'm sorry.

intravenusann December 6 2006, 06:58:16 UTC

Don't be. This week has been full of this kind of thing coming up in class and whatnot and people being "think of the good :Db" and I just want to say some of the things that you very succinctly expressed in this story. And it was really good.

Plus, I happen to be both fond and really hateful towards both Steinbeck and Burns. It's a little lame, but your writing really "connected" with me.

michichu2 December 6 2006, 07:13:47 UTC

It's not lame at all. I'm extremely flattered. And really very very glad in Michi-as-the-author sense.

(I love Of Mice and Men. Burns inspired Steinbeck inspired me.)

In the Michi-as-your-friend sense, my heart goes out to you.

People are retarded if they think you can just "think of the good times" and then magically be less sad. However, it's probably more likely that they say these things for lack of knowing what to say but feel the need to say something, especially something positive.

lunarisu December 28 2006, 02:56:38 UTC

Took me a while to spot this piece since I, like, entirely ignore my cluttered friends page and just click people I feel like reading whenever...but I'm glad I caught it. This is my favorite of yours so far. Hell, it's the best piece in GENERAL that I've read in a while. Everything seemed to come together plot-wise....and the humor made me laugh aloud time and time again. "It's funny, 'cuz it's so true. True; hence: funny."

I love so much how, when you write, it doesn't end up being a big, fat, fucking self-absorbed, Lifetime channel screenplay-esque scrap of shit, bluntly. I adore that liek whoa.

michichu2 December 28 2006, 18:17:24 UTC

Wah! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm rather proud of this (and also open to criticism) since I took a lot of risks this time (i.e. completely abandoning the poetic language I'm so fond of and that comes to me so easily). I'm glad it's funny. It's meant to be funny. (And humour is one of the hardest things to write)

Thank you so much for your comment, dear! I really appreciate it!

strawberry_snow January 5 2007, 09:41:38 UTC

I'm with lunarisu, I'm so completely unpredictably sporadic with when I check journals. But I read this, and it was so damn pretty even without being full of your usual massive metaphors and imagery (which, btw, I love-- word play and artistry are my idols). I think it sounded more real, and more poetic, and more professional, and more exactly the style I love. The epitaphs were a beautiful touch, too, and there's some specific quality about how you write-- in your poetic-language modes, and something more clear-cut like this-- that I love, but can't quite pin down. I know it has to do with the way you put phrases together to complement each other, but I can't figure out what it is.

Anyway, I love you. That's all. Buh-bai. ♥