While photo 1 is an awesome picture of me and heathkit, I think you are a bit too far in the background. Especially for it to be the first picture. Photo 2 is too shiny.
The text is overall good. The one part that jumped out at me I didn't really think fit was the phrase "I'm ever so slightly crazy about them"
Well, the order is based on how they were named, not necessarily how I will present them in the ad. I have a secondary group of people from work looking this over, and they're currently in the process of deciding what to do about that first picture. The other two variants are cropped on just me, or have me in an egg of normal color around me and a darkening of the rest of the image.
How about if I took out the "ever so" from that phrase?
I've never been on a dating website so I don't know how these sorts of things usually sound or what people are usually looking for, but I think this is good... to me, you come off as playful, self-aware, and honest.
I can see the part about guinea pigs coming off as borderline creepy, but if it's true, it's true, you know? (The part about the guinea pigs. Not you being creepy.) Literally every single picture on my cell phone is of my cats, and usually there are 3 cats in my bed with me every night, and I talk to my cats as if they were talking back to me... so while I wouldn't necessarily put all that in my profile, I'd definitely include some sort of "love me, love my cats and yeah I'm a crazy cat lady" disclaimer. If that makes any sense.
Also, you're the second person to tell me the guinea pig paragraph was kind of creepy. Would it be better to just take it out completely and instead take a photo of me with the girls?
I don't know, there's nothing wrong with being like "I'm a crazy guinea pig guy," but the whole rest of your ad is like "I'm a wacky guy, and I know I'm wacky, haha!" and your guinea pig paragraph doesn't have the "I know I'm wacky" part... just the crazy part. So I would either tone down the emphasis on how crazy you are about your guinea AND put something at the end that's like, PS I know I'm the male version of a crazy cat lady but with guinea pigs, OR do the picture idea.
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The text is overall good. The one part that jumped out at me I didn't really think fit was the phrase "I'm ever so slightly crazy about them"
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How about if I took out the "ever so" from that phrase?
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I can see the part about guinea pigs coming off as borderline creepy, but if it's true, it's true, you know? (The part about the guinea pigs. Not you being creepy.) Literally every single picture on my cell phone is of my cats, and usually there are 3 cats in my bed with me every night, and I talk to my cats as if they were talking back to me... so while I wouldn't necessarily put all that in my profile, I'd definitely include some sort of "love me, love my cats and yeah I'm a crazy cat lady" disclaimer. If that makes any sense.
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Also, you're the second person to tell me the guinea pig paragraph was kind of creepy. Would it be better to just take it out completely and instead take a photo of me with the girls?
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