SGA ficlette: Calm After The Storm

[mhalachaiswords]

This is for slythhearted, who was wondering how the events of The Storm/The Eye affected the attitude of the Marines under his command. I'm not sure what the Marines think, so I had to go for Sergeant Bates' POV.

As an aside, what is it about SGA that makes me want to write tiny stories in present tense? It's a totally weird thing for me. K, onto fic.

Calm

Comments

[mhalachaiswords]

Glad you liked it :) Thanks for the idea.

[shadowartemis]

First, Spelling Error or Something thing: Bates didn't like the burgeoning hero worship, even though he knew he it would make disciple easier. He knew it would make discipline, maybe??

Second, nice character portrayal. You seem to be having a lot of fun digging into the Atlantis cast. <3

To quote his drill sergeant, holy motherfucking shit. XD You always manage to start these with the most interesting attention-grabbing sentences.. I love it.

but Bates was Not Going There. XD I actually giggled when I read that part.

<3 <3 <3

[shadowartemis]

...would make disciple easier. Unless of course you were playing off that whole walking on water thing. :) *now has images of the marines entering discipleship (that does not look right.. o_O *stares at the spelling* Although the idea doesn't really look right either. XD)*

[mhalachaiswords]

No, that wasn't the idea, although that does fit in with the themes :)

[mhalachaiswords]

Gah. I stared at that word for a minute the first time and was convinced it was right.

Glad you liked it; I like to explore all these characters. There are so many of them, and they're all so very pretty a new challenge.

Also, I'm a huge fan of the big first sentnece. You need to draw people in, right?

[plsteward]

I love seeing John through the eyes of others. John is just one person who doesn't see himself, he just sees the world, not his place in it (might be why he's so in love with flying & able to swing from killer to kid.) Rodney, Elizabeth, & Carson are usually the characters that authors pick to anylize John, but picking a person who doesn't want to like John was brill, because they will either lie to themselves or say nothing but the truthiness.

I wish it was longer, but then again that wouldn't work.

Loved.

[mhalachaiswords]

John is just one person who doesn't see himself, he just sees the world, not his place in it (might be why he's so in love with flying & able to swing from killer to kid.)

Very good point. His attitude doesn't seem to be a mask of his darker emotions.

You're right about picking a hater to describe the character. It's a lot easier, none of this "but all his good points" crap.

I keep wanting to write a fic of Teyla describing John (not in a shippy way), but I still haven't got enough understanding of her to do so. Oh well. In the interim, this'll have to do.

[firefox1490]

I have the urge to repeatedly stab you with a spork and it has nothing to do with this. I finally watcj Firefly.

[mhalachaiswords]

O_o

why am I going to get sporked? what'd I do?

[dvak_64]

Hell, if the stories kept up, the marines might start to believe the Major could step off the South pier and go for a nice stroll on the ocean.

Hey Bates? John Sheppard is Jesus Motherfucking Christ and we all know it. Now stop swimming in De Nile and accept the simple fact.

Interesting perspective, good length. Well done!

[mhalachaiswords]

Yeah, he is pretty nifty.

Glad you liked it. I had fun writing it; a new character POV is always a fun thing, especially one as unsympathetic as Bates.