The thing straddling your chest

[khronos_keeper]

Title: Nightmare
Rating: G
Pairing: Snake/Otacon, mostly friendship, some one-sided stuff.
Summary: Those dreams- they are not dreams. They are reliving, they are telling and retelling, they are the reality that sidles in, and after all is said and done, there is nothing that you can do about them. Especially not if you keep blaming it on the building

Comments

[bfm_od]

Surely this isn't the response you would prefer, but I just can't help it~

D'AWWW. <3

[khronos_keeper]

XD I'll take any response.

It's not too ooc for Otacon?

[darkfenixrising]

Nah, I wouldn't say that it was too OOC.

I mean, if you've played MGS4, you just have to notice how often they touch each other. LOL Otacon touched Snake's knee, Snake Otacon's back etc. So I would say he would think about hugging him (hell, they even did it in MGS2!) and nothing you wrote or made Otacon say was OOC IMHO. ;)

I actually liked it a lot and have waited for a hug. ^^

[bfm_od]

Not at all - I don't think it's far from him, actually. Since pre-MGS4 Otacon doesn't really get a whole lot of characterization comparatively, I'd say his mannerisms are at least partly up to the author. This is just as good a rendition as anyone else's, if you ask me. (I have ZERO knowledge of MGS4!Otacon's character sicne I haven't even touched the game yet, so if it's based on a slight reversal of that, then I can say nothing. Otherwise, I think this is the more likely natural progression overall.)

[karaii]

Wow, this was lovely ;_; I wish Dave didn't have so much dignity that he could've suffered through a hug or something...poor Snake D:

Uhm, just one question...what did you mean by this phrase?: " since he wasn't of the right nationality in the least to be claiming such self-abasing and melodramatic things "

Did you mean "religion" instead of "nationality"? o.o Maybe I'm just dumb and don't understand...

Well, anyways, I loved this fic <3 I wonder what his nightmares consisted of? It's cute that Otacon blurts out "Feel better"...I can so imagine him doing that xD

[khronos_keeper]

:D! Thank you! An' hah, yeah, it's that whole prickly soldier ideal. >_>

Well, I was linking the line of worshiping Snake to Otacon's anime. It's pretty common to have at least one character in almost every anime to worship another for whatever reason. Since it's a cultural thing for Japanese anime, I linked it to their nationality.

They're nightmares brought on from trauma. Metal Gear 1 and Metal Gear 2 Solid Snake saw him severely traumatized after he completed the missions, which prompted his retreat to Alaska. So the dreams probably consisting of screaming, dying people. Like Natasha and Big Boss from MG2. And.... Meryl in MGS1.

And yay! I'm glad I did Otacon alright.

[sarshin]

Aw, I almost wish Otacon had said the line about dolphins. And agreed with karaii about the nationality line.

But overall, this was a very lovely look into their lives, even if it does consist of nightmares <3

[khronos_keeper]

XD It would have made for a longer fic and a somewhat more diffused ending, with Snake probably laughing.

As for the nationality line, I left a comment for karaii which, hopefully, answers.

And thank you!

[jaclynhyde]

Lovely. The characterizations are great, and I love the mood--melancholy, but with hints of sweetness (I especially like Snake checking Otacon's vital signs without saying a word).

...DAMMIT OTACON, GIVE HIM A HUG.

[khronos_keeper]

Thank you! I'm very pleased it went off well. :D And I'm glad the mood wasn't too fluffy or too seeping in angst.

DAMN THOSE AWKWARD TECHIES.

[sugarsurge]

But only robots don't like hugs.

Also, the only thing that threw me was how you called them coffin sticks instead of coffin nails or cancer sticks.
That's only a minor detail though and the fic is still well written, time for me to get some sleep myself.

[khronos_keeper]

Thanks for catching that! Changed to cancer sticks. As I was writing it, I had the worst feeling I had been mixing my metaphors.