The Middle of the Story

[bratanimus]

Title: The Middle of the Story
Author: bratanimus
Rating & Warnings: PG-13 for talk of death, gross slug activity
Prompts: Day of screams, flesh-eating slugs, horror, and location #18 (the tree)
Word Count: 2,254
Summary: A ghost story that started with an ending, and finished with a beginning.
Author’s Note: A big THANK YOU to ladybracknell for her beta and

Comments

[mrstater]

Oh, this is brilliant! So brilliant that it's difficult to even really know what to say apart from that, and I'm sure my review will be less-than-brilliant. ;) I think in summary this just rocks because it's utterly Halloween and utterly HP -- and of course, utterly R/T. Your Remus voice is wacky and witty and whimsical and...sad. (Couldn't think of a w-word for that, lol.) This is just so interesting and you draw me into the story so well by connecting me with Teddy and to Remus and Tonks, who like him I really really wish I could know and I really wish they could do all the things in this achingly sad paragraph: hese hands would never pick you up. You’d never ride on my shoulders, hanging onto my index fingers. As you grew, we couldn’t play together. Your mum wouldn’t be able to teach you to ride a broomstick, and I couldn’t teach you to cook. We’d never swim in the ocean together. We’d never hug and kiss your wife, lift your laughing children above our heads.

And to think all this came from a prompt flesh-eating slugs! (Which is very gruesome, and which you've used in such a creative way, without going over the top with it.)

Really, really well done, and a great midday pick-me-up. (Which is probably twisted, seeing as it's a horror story, lol.)

[bratanimus]

Thank you! *blush* I really wanted to tell some sort of ghost story for Halloween, but I had no idea R/T themselves would be the ghosts until it hit me like a ton of bricks that perhaps Remus, like Sir Nick, might feel he'd left something unfinished. And of course Tonk would have to tag along because she couldn't bear to be away from him (and she probably kept him from bollocksing things up even worse ;)).

I'm very glad you like Remus' voice in this; I figured he'd be one witty ghost, and I did have fun writing him that way, so I'm glad it worked in your eyes. Also glad you liked the use of the slugs; once it hit me what those slugs probably REALLY do, I had no trouble with the prompt, lol. ;)

Thanks again! I really appreciate your kind words and I'm very glad you liked this. :D