The Balance
Title: The Balance
Author: bratanimus
Summary: Her legs felt like tree trunks. Her toes were gnarled roots, not meant for walking, not meant for carrying her somewhere where things would end rather than begin. My take on one of the final scenes of Deathly Hallows. Remus/Tonks, Harry/Ginny, Neville/Luna, Ron/Hermione.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Talk of death
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Author: bratanimus
Summary: Her legs felt like tree trunks. Her toes were gnarled roots, not meant for walking, not meant for carrying her somewhere where things would end rather than begin. My take on one of the final scenes of Deathly Hallows. Remus/Tonks, Harry/Ginny, Neville/Luna, Ron/Hermione.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Talk of death
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Brilliant evocation of the setting/mood at the beginning (little phrases especially popped out producing a vivid reaction for me, like "She couldn’t look at Ginny holding Harry’s cold hand, Ginny panting and stumbling beside him because she refused to let it go, stubborn girl", "even though the students had been sent home for good at Christmas", "Not as long as her legs were still carrying her toward where she thought Remus might be. Not while she pulled the barely-breathing body of Harry Potter behind her on a Conjured stretcher" and the one about Neville with his fists clenched after missing Bellatrix...don't worry, I'm not going to quote your whole fic back at you ;D)
and then the Snape thing! Genius! I'm literally light-headed from excitement. And Remus and Tonks' reunion was heart-racingly, gut-wrenchingly wonderful. I love that they were separated for the final battle, so much tension potential and excellently exploited. Tonks' voice was perfect too, just the right amount of Tonsk-y whilst also being strong - a warrior in the battle to end all battles and a woman in love, which is the essential jist of what her character is.
If only we get this on Saturday, I would be very happy!
Oh, randomly:
“What does it mean?” asked Bellatrix, staring at her own Dark Mark and touching it gingerly.
That sentence was completely perfect and I could see Helena Bonham Carter as Bellatrix doing it as I read it.
Oh, also, one question just out of curiosity. The "odd look" on Remus' face when he comes in, is that because he doesn't see Tonks and thinks she might be dead or because he recognises her as Snape, or another reason that I'm missing?
Oh yeah, last thing! The bit about Tonks catching Pomfrey's eye you have unfortunately, but surely it's fortunately, right? I'm guessing it's just a typo and I normally don't mention them but it confused me for about a paragraph so I thought it'd be worth bringing to your attention.
Thanks for the awesome fic!
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The "odd look" on Remus' face is simply because he's looking at Snape, a person he knows to be dead because he saw the body, and it jolts him. When he gets over the initial shock, he suspects that this "Snape" is actually Tonks, because there's no other option, really, that he knows of; but at the same time he's almost afraid to hope that it's her. Too bad Tonks can't read all that in his expression. ;) Sorry that was confusing!
And the "unfortunately" actually was intentional, but I realize now that it IS confusing. Thank you for pointing that out! :D What I meant by it was that because Pomfrey revealed by her facial expression that someone was peeking through the doorway, there was no option for Tonks and the kids to get away, warn the other Order members, and plan an attack on the Infirmary to rescue Pomfrey. Because Pomfrey gave it away to the Death Eaters that there was someone there, Tonks had no choice but to enter the room and try to gain the upper hand the only way she knew how.
I wish I could go back and edit this, but the edit button is not an option on this community! I will fix it on my personal LJ. Thank you for bringing that to my attention! I was rushing to get this in on time, and that was one of the last things I tweaked ... ;)
Anyway, thank you again for your kind words. I really do appreciate them! :D
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