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[oneandonlysusan]

Title: Burden
Author: oneandonlysusan
Genre: General/slight angst/romance.
Rating & Warnings: PG-13
Prompts: sunset; "'Course Dumbledore trusts you. He's a trusting man, isn't he? Believes in second chances. But me -- I say there are spots that don't come off, Snape. Spots that never come off, know what I mean?"
Word Count: 5,086
Summary: After the

Comments

[gilpin25]

To echo everyone else, I very much enjoyed this. It's a lovely, quiet read and you've got a lovely, quiet style to go along with it and which gives the reader time to absorb what you're saying about the characters. And it works well because Remus is doing so much thinking here...

I think you did very well getting the complexity of Sirius across, as well as the relationship between him and Remus, which often seems to me to be a reversal of their school days. I particularly liked this passage:

Sirius ended (between tears of delight, unrestrainable laughter and while talking to a cabinet with a gargoyle’s face for a handle) with stories that Remus couldn’t quite remember; stories of flying hippogriffs and silver stags. In these stories, the names Harry and James were near interchangeable, and Remus was never sure where the reality Remus knew ended and the reality Sirius knew began.

The R/T interaction is just great - very natural and it's such a slow build onto them kissing and him asking her out. Really lovely. And the last line of the whole fic is a real poignant corker!

Congrats on your first fic here and here's to many more, I hope. (Go on, do the date one suggested;)). I was hooked by this from start to finish. :)

[oneandonlysusan]

Thank you!

I'm glad you liked that passage...It took me awhile to write it, actually. I just couldn't get the wording right the first few times I edited, and then it just sort of came to me.

Sorry about responding late...As I told everyone else who commented, I went on vacation and didn't get internet access until I got back home tonight.

I think I will write the date! Thanks again for the kind comments.