Changes

[godricgal]

Title: Changes
Author: godricgal
Rating and Warnings PG-13, for sexual references
Word Count 1,924
Prompts: Thestrals, scratch, Sirius, Drama
Summary: The night before Dumbledore's funeral, Tonks asks Remus a question that provokes many thoughts.
Author's Notes: I'm very hesitant about posting this fic, the prompt uses are minimal, at best. It's unpolished

Comments

[shimotsuki]

I really liked this; it's such a plausible version of how to get from the hospital-wing scene to vividest pink at the funeral. Something important has to have changed Remus's mind, and this is a great idea, to have him explicitly realize he wants to be the one to be there for Tonks when she needs him.

Your delicate use of concrete physical details is just beautiful -- how they are lying, how they touch. It makes the scene vividly real and even more emotionally satisfying.

I especially liked this line: He is torn; torn between prolonging the light-hearted moment and not trivialising what that moment had meant to him -- to them, and the root cause of the change in her. Somehow this really sums up for me all the complicated emotions Remus is feeling here, from relief to guilt to joy.

And this one is heartbreaking: He can't bear it, actually, to know that she's longed for him as much as he has for her. He understands that hurt and pain and hadn't expected the same from her. It drives home the fact that Remus has trouble believing he can be important to people too.