Subterfuge

[shimotsuki]

Title: Subterfuge
Author: shimotsuki
Format: One-shot
Rating: PG
Warnings: Mild violence
Prompts: Healing Paste; Fred/George, Mad-Eye; think; action/adventure
Word Count: 3036 words
Summary [revised]: Tonks answers a summons from Remus. It's the first she's seen him since he left to join Greyback's pack, and George Weasley, along to help out, picks up on

Comments

[mrstater]

Oh, this is wonderful. Barely anyone writes Remus underground fics that deal with him interacting with the other werewolves as people trying to survive, as opposed to the monster stuff. I would think that just having to scavenge for the bare essentials, and to basically have a rough, shiftless existence among the poor and uneducated and disenfranchised would be the worst thing of all for Remus; he's doing a job but has nothing to do really, and so it becomes easy for him to empathize, or to identify with them.

Writing this from George's POV was a great choice, too, because I feel like what's going on between Remus and Tonks is so subtle, but so much more poignant than reading the standard assertions of love: that end bit, with him saying "best mate" and her being disappointed till she realizes, but George doesn't, that Remus meant so much more, was really heart-breaking.

And the plot is great, too. I really liked the start at the joke shop, and that Tonks' bruise came back into the storyline in such an important way.

Really, really well done!

[shimotsuki]

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a detailed, thoughtful comment! I was really nervous about trying action/adventure and having to handle multiple prompts, so I'm happy to hear that you thought it worked okay as a plot. I have a feeling that the ratio of true "action" or "adventure" to dialogue and emoting is still pretty low, but at least I got my feet wet, and now it's less scary to think about doing another a/a fic sometime.

(By the way, I am so impressed that you've managed a four-part mystery story, and I can't wait to read it, but I may not have a chance to do much reading until the weekend.)