Title: Ever So by rosedemonChallenge Prompts: Judgement Day, cinema, angst and "I know Lupin tried to talk her round, but she's still really down
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Typically I tend to think post-DOM hookups don't work very well, but this piece is an exception. I like that, even though they're both sad over Sirius, they don't seem overwhelmed or driven by a need to do something that feels like living. It's a gentle start to a relationship, much like I could envision it starting under any circumstances, and Remus' sweet romancing works nicely with a sense that they're not aware of just how bad things are going to get and what horrible timing this is.
So this is a particularly good use of your take on the "Lupin's been trying to talk her around" prompt instead of quoting it direction. This fic could also expand nicely if you ever wanted, maybe starting out a little more angsty, with Remus asking her for the date, and their decision for the movie, to show him making efforts to bring her out of her sadness.
The formal banter in the cafe is really cute. I can imagine Remus naturally being the proper gentleman, and Tonks loving it, but then them both hamming it up.
One thing I'm unsure of is Harry, Ron, and Hermione being aware of this. We know in HBP that Hermione's seen them talking, but the other two are pretty clueless. Maybe Order members instead? Bill, Arthur, and Molly perhaps?
But really, this is a nice little moment, and I'm glad you found some time to write.
First off, thanks for commenting and for the crit. It helps. :D
I may or may not do anything else with this..although I liked the ending a bit. May plagerise myself and paste it on another turn of the first time for them. And I am also not fond of the post-DOM get together stories. I do not see grief as a good basis for any one to start a romantic relationship. However, with the way this thing developed it just seemed natural.
Anyway..thanks again for the crit. It will help in the future.
So this is a particularly good use of your take on the "Lupin's been trying to talk her around" prompt instead of quoting it direction. This fic could also expand nicely if you ever wanted, maybe starting out a little more angsty, with Remus asking her for the date, and their decision for the movie, to show him making efforts to bring her out of her sadness.
The formal banter in the cafe is really cute. I can imagine Remus naturally being the proper gentleman, and Tonks loving it, but then them both hamming it up.
One thing I'm unsure of is Harry, Ron, and Hermione being aware of this. We know in HBP that Hermione's seen them talking, but the other two are pretty clueless. Maybe Order members instead? Bill, Arthur, and Molly perhaps?
But really, this is a nice little moment, and I'm glad you found some time to write.
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I may or may not do anything else with this..although I liked the ending a bit. May plagerise myself and paste it on another turn of the first time for them. And I am also not fond of the post-DOM get together stories. I do not see grief as a good basis for any one to start a romantic relationship. However, with the way this thing developed it just seemed natural.
Anyway..thanks again for the crit. It will help in the future.
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