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Fic: I Ask You To Be Mine

Dec 30, 2009 15:56

Title: I Ask You To Be Mine
Author: carnivalgirl
Ratings: G. Severe fluff warning.
Format & Word Count:Fic, 3883 words
Prompts: Enchanted snow and "Well, think back… Have you ever let it slip that you'd like to go out in public with the words 'My Sweetheart' round your neck?" (HBP)
Summary: June between HBP and DH, and Remus is ready to propose to Tonks, but ( Read more... )

romance, carnivalgirl, christmas cracker advent

Comments 17

more_ruthless December 30 2009, 18:14:31 UTC

I just adore the image of the enchanted snow and an indoor snowman. How delightful.

carnivalgirl January 2 2010, 00:27:41 UTC

Thank you! I can just imagine little wizard kids keeping their indoor snowmen up all Christmas. :)

the_conspiracie December 30 2009, 19:37:44 UTC

d'aww. I love this in all of its fluffy entirety. I especially like how the ring is opal - it's a perfect metaphor. Nice job!

carnivalgirl January 2 2010, 00:28:53 UTC

I've used the opal things several times, so I'm happy to know it's not just me who appeciates thing. Thank you for commenting, I'm glad you loved it!

francesca_blue December 31 2009, 00:12:28 UTC

That was beautiful, and lovely, and all things wonderful.

I only have one tiny nitpick, and that's that Remus used the name Voldemort, which would have brought Snatchers down on them on Christmas Day. :(

I liked your old man in the jewellery shop very much; he was a wonderful character.

You managed to balance the contrasting moods - happiness and sadness and uncertainty - very well, giving a very a very clear picture of what Christmas must have been like for Remus and Tonks in DH.

I love the idea of an indoor snowman! Why didn't I think of that?! (My prompt was snowman.)

Overall, it was fantastic, and I can't pick a favourite bit because it's all too good; otherwise I'd tell you what it was.

carnivalgirl January 2 2010, 00:31:08 UTC

I knew there had to be something wrong! Thank you very much, I'll change it. I'm happy you liked the old man, you can credit an_ardent_rain for wanting more detail about him.

I'm so glad I could put the uncertainty across. I think no matter how YAY CHRISTMAS YAY they tried to get it would still be a bit of a painful time. I'm so happy you liked this, thank you for the kind comments. And I'm sure you did fine with your prompt...I'll read your story soon, I promise!

sspring92 December 31 2009, 04:41:51 UTC

O...M...G...::sniff:: I choose to believe AU and that they did get a next Christmas, and a next and a next! Very sweet , love indoor snow! What a great concept!

carnivalgirl January 2 2010, 00:32:25 UTC

I believe in AU to the point of forgetting the canon sometimes, so you can believe they're just being pessimistic here, lol.

I'm happy you liked the indoor snow! It was actually JKR's idea, not mine, though I think it must have gotten a whole line in the series.

Thank you for commenting!

mollywheezy December 31 2009, 15:10:44 UTC

I want indoor snow! :D

I really loved the enchantments on the ring. What a wonderful idea!

carnivalgirl January 2 2010, 00:34:06 UTC

Me too! It would be so much fun to play with, as long as it didn't freeze your hands.

I'm very happy someone liked the enchantment on the ring and that it worked, I was worried it would seem a bit corny or something. Thank you very much!