Unwrapped, by MrsTater

[mrstater]

Title: Unwrapped
Author: MrsTater
Rating & Warnings: R for sexuality
Prompts: presents and the quote: “We'll be changing the rules, a little bit. We are opening the presents now. Not later, now. Why? We're adults, and we can open our presents, whenever we want!” (The Ref)
Word Count: 2823 words
Summary: You know Remus wants you, but he doesn't

Comments

[mrstater]

Aw, I'm sorry you didn't quite squeeze in as first reviewer, but wow, what a lovely review! I wasn't sure how much people would like reading the 2nd person or the jumping around between narrators, so I really appreciate your thoughtful comments and am relieved you think it was effective!

I didn't really set out to write this in 2nd person -- I've written a couple pieces for another fandom lately, so I guess it was just on my brain. I thought what the heck, I'll just run with it, and I was kind of startled at how 2nd person kicks romance up a notch, which actually made me really glad this fic wanted to end before I got to the actual sex, after all! I'm so pleased you felt it worked for capturing Remus' and Tonks' respective personalities, as I was concerned there wasn't enough differentiation between them in that narrative voice.

Thanks so much for copying and commenting on your favorite lines. It's always so nice to know which bits made people laugh or have a reaction you were hoping for. And I did hope people would be disturbed by the idea of Molly in lingerie, hehe. ;)

Again, I really appreciate you reading and taking the time to offer such thoughtful commentary. It means a lot. Good luck with your own pieces! (And no worries, I hear voices, too...)