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Fic: "Journey of Persistence"

Jun 10, 2008 20:25

Title: Journey of Persistence
Author: shoebox_addict
Rating & Warnings: T -- Adult situations but no explicit description
Prompts: “journey” and “Strawberry Fields Forever” lyrics
Word Count: 5,245
Summary: Remus visits Tonks against his better judgment over the holidays.
Author’s Notes: This story takes place during Christmas of HBP. This is ( Read more... )

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Comments 14

sasher_copy June 12 2008, 00:32:19 UTC

That was extraordinarily beautiful.

I'm in complete awe.

shoebox_addict June 12 2008, 23:19:11 UTC

Wow! Thank you so much! I am very glad you liked it that much. :D

mrstater June 12 2008, 00:50:17 UTC

What a unique and interesting take on Christmas HBP, and indeed, the HBP/DH timeline! I was totally surprised by Tonks being fired before DH, but I think it worked really well for Tonks' depression and the extraordinarily bad timing of Remus' mission.

You did a good job with the angst. It's just painful to see them like this, and especially to see both of them second-guessing being together like they were. :( At least we know they do have happiness after this!

Great work!

shoebox_addict June 12 2008, 23:22:00 UTC

Thank you so much for reading! I'm glad you liked it, I was kinda nervous about this one cause I don't write angst that much. Anywho, so glad you liked it and you thought the angst worked! Yayness! :D

Yes, the only happy thought is that they do get married and have darling little Teddy. :)

shimotsuki June 12 2008, 02:46:26 UTC

Oh, no -- he left her while she was asleep again! Sigh. A heartbreaking look at both of them, but you've made Remus entirely sympathetic even as we watch him being wrong. When Molly said she thought Tonks was coming for Christmas dinner, I was surprised, but this story makes for a very good explanation of why she wasn't there. (Poor Tonks...)

I really enjoyed the opening scenes, too -- watching Remus's reaction to being at the Burrow says so much about how awful his experience with the pack has been.

shoebox_addict June 12 2008, 23:27:02 UTC

Thank you!!! I'm so pleased you liked it! Thanks for reading and taking the time to review! :)

train_lindz June 14 2008, 22:21:22 UTC

I've read this a couple times now and am still unable to come up with a coherant review :)

I loved it and wanted to shake Remus to his senses all at the same time. I wondered how you were going to explain Tonks not being at the Burrow for Christmas, and you did not disappoint. Job well done!

shoebox_addict June 22 2008, 21:34:56 UTC

WOW. That is so flattering, that my fic rendered you incoherent! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!! Thank you soooo much! :D

anonymous June 15 2008, 07:14:22 UTC

"Tonks, please," he said, putting an arm around her shaking shoulders. "I can't stand to see you cry."

Tonks looked up at him with longing in her eyes. "You do care."

Remus sighed. "Of course I care. That's why I'm telling you that it would be better for you if you would find someone else."

"You don't care," said Tonks, shrugging his arm off her shoulders.

"What?"

This was really cute. And angsty.

shoebox_addict June 22 2008, 21:43:16 UTC

Thanks. Glad you liked it! :)