Awww... yeah, it is angsty. I do like the way you played with the colours, especially for him.
And yeah... when she's so upset, it shows. She can't pretend, not deep down inside - so she fades, and she might as well drink, and she can't bring herself to care about tidiness... not when it's unlikely that he'll see the flat like that.
While, on the other hand, he hides so much - and so much pain - anyway that it barely seems that he's more upset than usual... only he is too.
Oh, there seem to be many angsty fics around here this time. ;)
I enjoyed reading your very first fic, and hopefully you'll continue to write since this one is so lovely and heart wrenching.
I love the depiction of Remus and Tonks way of celebrating christmas, how his assumptions about her prove to be right. I can imagine, how Remus spend his time longing for her, you describe both their situations very well. Especially like the mess in Tonks flat, it kind of describes her own emotions. Great work!
This is a really great take on Christmas, HBP. You do a great job with describing the details of the setting that really establish the characters' moods. I really feel for them in this! The poor things, I just want to hug them.
Really liked what you did with the idea of colour here; how Tonks is surrounded by it, yet the decorations are now an inconvenience and irritation to her, while Remus sees all the colours surrounding him as muted and dull (which is what's happened to her). Except for the pink, of course. There's some very nice descriptions in your writing, which really help the reader to visualise her messy and neglected flat.
I enjoyed the paragraph about Tonks' memories of the 'magic' of Christmas as a child, and what it had meant to her back then, and how she'd been anticpating this one as the best one ever. I wondered if you could have mirrored that in Remus' part, as a way of showing how it had all gone so very wrong for him too? Of course, I may be encouraging you to turn the angst screw even more with that one, lol.
Very well done on your first R/T fic, you used the prompts really imaginatively, and you know I hope it's the first of many more! :)
I wondered if you could have mirrored that in Remus' part
Hmmm, I would have liked to - but I rushed that last bit so much to get it done I completely ignored the obvious, lol. There's only so much time you can spend writing a fic pretending it's English revision ;)
Thank you! I do hope to do more, but time is worrying me now - I was alright 'till 2008 - now I'm panicking, lol - my exams seem entirely too close for comfort :)
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And yeah... when she's so upset, it shows. She can't pretend, not deep down inside - so she fades, and she might as well drink, and she can't bring herself to care about tidiness... not when it's unlikely that he'll see the flat like that.
While, on the other hand, he hides so much - and so much pain - anyway that it barely seems that he's more upset than usual... only he is too.
I like it, thank you for sharing!
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I enjoyed reading your very first fic, and hopefully you'll continue to write since this one is so lovely and heart wrenching.
I love the depiction of Remus and Tonks way of celebrating christmas, how his assumptions about her prove to be right. I can imagine, how Remus spend his time longing for her, you describe both their situations very well.
Especially like the mess in Tonks flat, it kind of describes her own emotions.
Great work!
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I would love to write more but I don't know if I'll have the time. I think I'll have to make time, lol.
I'm glad you liked it :)
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LOL - hug away, although I may have to fight you for Remus ;)
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I enjoyed the paragraph about Tonks' memories of the 'magic' of Christmas as a child, and what it had meant to her back then, and how she'd been anticpating this one as the best one ever. I wondered if you could have mirrored that in Remus' part, as a way of showing how it had all gone so very wrong for him too? Of course, I may be encouraging you to turn the angst screw even more with that one, lol.
Very well done on your first R/T fic, you used the prompts really imaginatively, and you know I hope it's the first of many more! :)
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I wondered if you could have mirrored that in Remus' part
Hmmm, I would have liked to - but I rushed that last bit so much to get it done I completely ignored the obvious, lol. There's only so much time you can spend writing a fic pretending it's English revision ;)
Thank you! I do hope to do more, but time is worrying me now - I was alright 'till 2008 - now I'm panicking, lol - my exams seem entirely too close for comfort :)
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