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Asking for Forever

Oct 15, 2007 01:36

Title: Asking for Forever
Author: shimotsuki
Rating & Warnings: PG-13 for mild profanity and cuddling. DH spoilers.
Prompts: Drama; a day of falls; Felix Felicis (metaphorically); image #26 (stairs down to a door)
Word Count: 5020
Summary: A mere fortnight after the relationship finally begins is hardly the best time to ask a certain question. But what if ( Read more... )

shimotsuki, drama, all hallows' moon jumble

Comments 42

parapsionic October 15 2007, 09:35:42 UTC

I really liked this! I thought that Tonks would be facing Remus' insecurities again, given that they've only been together for a fortnight, but you proved me wrong! Remus is incredibly sweet here; I love how he focuses on the little things that make Tonks happy and does them, and his whole realization that he made her happy and thinking about her as his wife towards the end... that made me go all "aww." :)

Your Tonks is very realistic here, and I felt for her as she tried to find ways to pop the question without scaring him off because of the newness and fragility of their relationship. And your reason for their marriage before DH - which was really sudden, considering the circumstances - made sense! Nothing like Umbridge's laws to get Tonks and Remus hitched, LOL! :)

Thanks for sharing this!

shimotsuki October 16 2007, 02:24:30 UTC

Thank you so much for the thoughtful review! I'm happy to hear you thought the characters and situation worked here.

I thought that Tonks would be facing Remus' insecurities again -- Heh. Remus is high on euphoria at this point, and he convinces himself that there won't be any bad consequences for Tonks at the Ministry if she marries him (that's the Felix Felicis bit). There's a giant mood-swing looming when he finds out he was wrong.

otahyoni October 15 2007, 15:52:18 UTC

Oh, that was lovely. :)

shimotsuki October 16 2007, 02:25:14 UTC

Thank you!

train_lindz October 15 2007, 16:59:05 UTC

I really liked this story!

Your use of Felix Felicis so counts!

shimotsuki October 16 2007, 02:26:32 UTC

Thanks! And I'm glad you thought the Felix Felicis should count, heh.

jadeddiva October 15 2007, 17:22:38 UTC

Fantastic use of the prompts and great story overall. I love that it's a plausible way to consider how they got married, and you give both characters a great deal of dimension over a short amount of time. A lovely little snapshot into their co-existence ;)

shimotsuki October 16 2007, 02:27:56 UTC

Thanks for the encouraging comments! I'm really glad you found the situation plausible -- in my ficverse, they never actually got together before Remus went away, so when the new canon came out I needed a really good reason for them to get married so fast.

katyscarlett76 October 15 2007, 19:13:49 UTC

I really liked this, you wrote a really plausible explanation for their quick marriage and really made me feel Tonks' pain. Particularly when she fell over the her robes and banged herself on the coffee table, I winced when I read that. And then when she started crying, oh...

I really like how you used Felix Felicis, not the obvious way and I liked it all the more for that.

Oh and I loved Remus' acknowledgement that it's all the little things he does that make Tonks happy, so sweet.

Really well done!

shimotsuki October 16 2007, 02:29:27 UTC

Thank you for the thoughtful comments! I'm glad you liked the Felix Felicis bit -- it struck me as a good way to show just how euphoric (and oblivious, unfortunately) the change in his relationship with Tonks has made Remus.