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Fiction by Brenna: Permanent Scars

Jul 20, 2009 14:23

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i_amsherlocked July 20 2009, 20:33:07 UTC

beautiful, Brenna.

brennayovanoff July 20 2009, 20:47:37 UTC

Thank you :)

tessagratton July 20 2009, 20:43:52 UTC

Oh my god, I can't wait for you to rewrite On Earth.

This is lovely. Like a poem. A long, prose poem.

The descriptions of him are beautiful. "He has all the trappings of humanity, the emotions, the colors, but he decided not to keep it."

"The boy is tall, with dirty-blond hair and eyes the clear color of water. Of snow-melt. A gift to me on Ash Wednesday, he comes complete with history and guilt. With the smell of leaves and branches, burning."

brennayovanoff July 20 2009, 20:50:11 UTC

I love Truman. He is so handsome. In such an . . . unkempt way.

I'm getting seriously keyed-up to tackle this, but first things first--FE revisions, you are going down!

sylsome July 20 2009, 20:47:43 UTC

Could the prompt be any more perfect??? I loved this listing and making sense of things. It's so Daphne :)

brennayovanoff July 20 2009, 20:54:57 UTC

Could the prompt be any more perfect???

I know! I saw it and was like, wait, wait, I know this one!

gira July 20 2009, 21:29:19 UTC

I love this.

brennayovanoff July 21 2009, 15:21:48 UTC

Thanks!

simonhay_healer July 20 2009, 22:06:42 UTC

Great first and last lines. So many lines to love.

brennayovanoff July 21 2009, 15:22:03 UTC

Thanks, Simon!