Comments | mere_ubu: Spaiku (Open Grave Edition).

mere_ubu

Spaiku (Open Grave Edition).

Apr 23, 2008 21:30

How many haiku can one write about Spike doing a faceplant into an open grave? Quite a few, apparently. Here are the five I've limited myself to posting. BtVS, S5, "Out of My Mind" intro. R for profanity. As always, thanks to Mister Beta for his input.
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( five spaiku: out of my mind intro )

spaiku, out of my mind, btvs: s5, btvs: spike

Comments 33

powerofthebook April 24 2008, 04:31:35 UTC

Grave epiphany:
should have sidestepped the pitfall
of monologuing.

This says it all. Sheer brilliance.

mere_ubu April 24 2008, 16:21:03 UTC

Wow, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was particularly happy when that one finally clicked.

diachrony April 24 2008, 04:35:39 UTC

AWESOME. Especially love 2, 4 and 5. Soooooo gooooood!!!

mere_ubu April 24 2008, 16:25:15 UTC

*lol* Aw, thank you! I'm so glad that you liked them. :D

petzipellepingo April 24 2008, 09:20:19 UTC

Spins around, strides off,
seething with machinations--
trips on his hubris.

Yes, exactly! A classic case of pride goeth before a fall.
Nice job.

mere_ubu April 24 2008, 16:28:22 UTC

Thank you! I don't know why it tickles me so much when Spike gets his ass handed to him, but it does. I guess I'm just cruel. ;)

moscow_watcher April 24 2008, 09:51:53 UTC

Great drabbles!

perfect exit
undermined by farce.

Hee! Spot-on!

mere_ubu April 24 2008, 16:30:38 UTC

Poor Spike! He just can't get it right, can he?

Thanks for reading! :D

louise39 April 24 2008, 13:34:41 UTC

seething with machinations--
trips on his hubris

Perfect words to highlight that moment.
Poor Spike! Being the 'Big Bad' is sometimes painful.

mere_ubu April 24 2008, 16:34:00 UTC

Hee! The little scamp just can't seem stay out of trouble.

Thanks, Louise. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed them.

P.S. You icon makes me laugh.