Title: lullaby
Length: 1474
Characters/Pairings: Sam/Dean, kind of, and an unnamed third party.
Rating: pg-13?
Warnings: a small quantity of gore, a small quantity of incest.
Prompt: from
lylithj2 over at
spnpromptcake. Song lyric: Dream brother, my killer, my lover. ("Battle for the Sun” by Placebo) Object: Holy oil.
Beta by the excellent
blubird_pie. <3
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Firstly: the way you write is like poetry. It's beautiful. I love the details and the way you paint the scene. I love the scene itself. It's fucking creepy.
The passages in the italics were the best part. They're so true, and they ring so true of Sam, and just - the phrasing. Like fucking poetry, man. Nngh, it's so good. I didn't figure out what was happening until Dean started trying to find sam and then I was like DCGFJDFJGK OMG and then it ended that way and it was like whoooah. This is an intense, beautiful, creepy piece of work. I love it to death.
I had these nightmares, and sometimes, sometimes they came true.
My dreams were yellow then and smelled of blood. Now they’re red, and some things stay the same.
I have different nightmares now, and demons lie, but angels tell the truth.
Sometimes the nightmares came true, and these days, in my head, anyone could be listening.
THIIISSS. <3333 you <333333
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also also also
when I was writing that bit, guess whose icon i had in mind. <3
I'm so glad you like it, I thought it seemed kind of rough and weird.
(:
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lol <3 you should have more confidence in your writing, it is great stuff. Very well tied together and packs a LOT of punch. It was a little confusing in the middle but I really enjoyed it and feel like putting those italics to a wallpaper next time I have time to make one (on May 2, when I'm doing everything else I've been missing) - if you're okay with that, of course. <3
But yes. A+, would read again. <3
NEGL though, I was wincing at that head-dent. OUCH.
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aw, thank you! and obviously I would be okay with that.
HEAD-DENTS ARE <3
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YOU ARE THIS CLOSE. AND YOU GET TO WRITE OUR FAVORITE EVIL MASTERMIND.
GO GO GO
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omg your icon unnnf <3
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I CAN START REELING OFF ALL THE REASONS IT'S GONNA TAKE NAMES, IF YOU LIKE.
JUST WRITE. DON'T WORRY, JUST THINK ABOUT YOUR STORY. THINK ABOUT THE WEATHER AND THE SOUNDTRACK AND IMAGINE YOU'RE THERE AND START WRITING.
PLUS, YOU HAVE ME. AND YOUR OTHER BETA. BETWEEN US, I THINK YOU'LL BE ALL SET.
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I CAN DO THIS
I JUST DON'T
WANNA LET YOU DOWN
I MEAN IF YOU'RE GROWN UP ENOUGH TO FIND FAITH IN ME--
*wink~*
(get it, get it?)
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