Cause the sun don't always shine

[mee_eep]

I never ever write poetry the rules for it are a vague sleepy memory of some distant school class.
This verse came to me, it's neither Shakespear nor Slash but I'm sharing it regardless.
Make of it what you will.

Comments

[mee_eep]

In that kinda mood at the time.

Thanks :) Had visions of snotty posts pointing out where I went wrong lol everyone here is nice but I always second guess everything I share.
Too me poetry is individual people can and should be able to read it differently.

[charisstoma]

This is good. Poetry is making its own styles now.

Am hoping that the poem in not in relation to something that has happened to you personally. Bad enough that terrible things have been happening without it living inside you too.

[mee_eep]

Thanks :)

Not directly.
I'm in a better place, though there's still ways to go.

[grimmsical]

I dislike poetry as well. This, however, I read/heard (in my mind) as a song. The repetition of the too late was onomatopoetic - I could hear the train and the magpie and... Pretty. 's all. It was pretty. :)

[mee_eep]

aww this made my day thanks :)

For me it has it's own sound and backing but never know how others read something :)

[abstract_whisk]

For never writing poetry, I think you did pretty well. Personally, I am a great propenent of free verse poetry where most of those pesky rules can just be ignored. What you've written here is lyrical and touching. It conveys a lot of emotion. You created your own form, which is nice, and that form works to convey the emotion as much as the words individually do. I think it's very good. Just... sad. It makes me want to give hugs.

[mee_eep]

Thankyou :)
I don't get how people can write to rules without changing what they're trying to convey.

I'm glad mine works. >accepts hugs< -.- better :)