HEY BB. First of all I want to tell you that I adore you, and writing with you is amazing. <3 I'm so happy you're in this game with me.
Blaine is very IC overall, but I think there are a few things you need to work on. First and foremost, Blaine seems very static. He's a sixteen-year-old kid who has been plucked from his family and friends and placed in a horrible situation where he has to pretty much be an adult, you know? And so many things have happened since he got here. I would love to see him reacting more strongly, and for the more negative aspects of his personality to come through. Blaine is emotional and impulsive, and a very loud character--not loud as in yelling or anything, but loud in personality. He speaks his mind when he gets angry ("You're a really horrible person, you know that?"), gets physical when provoked (shoving Karofsky), and often does completely ridiculous things without thinking them through (GAP attack, anyone?). I don't really see this with your Blaine. You've got his sweetness and kindness down pat,
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Oh awesome. C: Okay. That makes sense. Thank you for explaining it to me.
Honestly, yeah, it is tough getting into those bigger kinds of plots, but I know Kelly and Tori and the other mods are great for helping out with that kind of thing. Honestly, I hate to push social networking on anybody, but Plurk is simply the best tool for plotting and talking to other players. That's how all my plotting happens, honestly. If you put your Plurk name in your plotting post and I spam it all over my own Plurk you'll get followers in no time. It's just an awesome way to stay connected and plot with people. c:
Really, if you sort of communicated how Blaine is thinking about all of these things internally, his reactions would make a lot more sense. Because especially in the situation with Yaha, he didn't react angrily so I didn't see that he was feeling that way. Maybe jump into his head a little more in brackets/prose? Just to detail his thought process a little more
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Blaine is very IC overall, but I think there are a few things you need to work on. First and foremost, Blaine seems very static. He's a sixteen-year-old kid who has been plucked from his family and friends and placed in a horrible situation where he has to pretty much be an adult, you know? And so many things have happened since he got here. I would love to see him reacting more strongly, and for the more negative aspects of his personality to come through. Blaine is emotional and impulsive, and a very loud character--not loud as in yelling or anything, but loud in personality. He speaks his mind when he gets angry ("You're a really horrible person, you know that?"), gets physical when provoked (shoving Karofsky), and often does completely ridiculous things without thinking them through (GAP attack, anyone?). I don't really see this with your Blaine. You've got his sweetness and kindness down pat, ( ... )
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Honestly, yeah, it is tough getting into those bigger kinds of plots, but I know Kelly and Tori and the other mods are great for helping out with that kind of thing. Honestly, I hate to push social networking on anybody, but Plurk is simply the best tool for plotting and talking to other players. That's how all my plotting happens, honestly. If you put your Plurk name in your plotting post and I spam it all over my own Plurk you'll get followers in no time. It's just an awesome way to stay connected and plot with people. c:
Really, if you sort of communicated how Blaine is thinking about all of these things internally, his reactions would make a lot more sense. Because especially in the situation with Yaha, he didn't react angrily so I didn't see that he was feeling that way. Maybe jump into his head a little more in brackets/prose? Just to detail his thought process a little more ( ... )
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