What? part 1

[mcmm1]

rating: pg ( for now C:)
pairings: i cant tell you because i mean
description: hahaha its a fan fiction you never know whats going to happen True Story ;)

Ian's pov
i was walking though the halls of my grubby hight school looking for Anthony my best friend where are you dummy ! "Anth-" i stoped i saw he was with that stupid cheerleader again even tho

Comments

[michaelangelo24]

Don't hate me for saying this, but your fic needs some work. The plot itself is fine and so are the characters; however, grammatically it is all over the place. I have a few suggestions to help you with your writing. You should use spell-check to catch most of the errors. If you are directly typing this in livejournal, just paste it in Word to check for errors. I also strongly recommend using periods to break up sentences. There are a lot of run-on sentences and they are very distracting. If you find yourself using "and" in a sentence more than once, stick in some periods. Also, it's common practice to start a new paragraph whenever someone new speaks. It will make your writing seem less crowded if you do that. Hopefully my tips help. Please don't take this all the wrong way; I just want to help. :)

thanks

[mcmm1]

thanks :) i needed to know what i need to do and know i know so thank you and i would never hate you.You are one of my favorite Ianthony writers

Re: thanks

[michaelangelo24]

Hopefully you'll be writing some epic fics soon with those tips. :)

Re: thanks

[mcmm1]

i hope so to :)btw i love your story Second Chances

Re: thanks

[michaelangelo24]

Thank you. :) My writing has certainly improved since I first started writing fics.