The Arch (Part 3)

Nov 12, 2007 07:41

Title: The Arch ( Read more... )

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rsharpe November 13 2007, 01:06:02 UTC
Rich with characterization, I am awed.

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mcicioni November 13 2007, 05:13:55 UTC

Many many thanks! Very happy you find my men 'in character'.

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zebra363 November 14 2007, 14:45:37 UTC
Oh, I'm glad they made it through Augustus' visit unscathed!

I especially liked the part with Vorenus overhearing Lyde say something about him and Pullo.

Would a man in Rome have thought sex with another man was unnatural? Or just not appropriate for someone at his level?

"Then do something for me, brother," a catch and a little shake of the head at the last word, as if it was inadequate but no others were available, "just this once,"

I like that very much. That's quite a believable start to their sexual relations.

Also enjoyed Augustus' reptilian eyes and the way both Pullo and Vorenus tried to protect the other from his possible wrath!

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mcicioni November 15 2007, 23:13:29 UTC
Good point (again) about Romans frowning on m/m relations because of propriety-connected reasons. Delighted, however, that you thought their 'first time' was believable.

And thank you for liking P and V double-crossinf each other, I loved writing it from V's pov because he *needs* to be shown that he isn't the only bright tool in the shed.

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tabula_x_rasa November 24 2007, 07:40:56 UTC
I just went hunting for this-- alas I missed it when you first posted!

You know I love this to pieces, of course. I really liked how you handled the doubts about their relationship and their first time was perfectly them, and yes, so how it happened.

Everything with the baby made me melt, especially the naming, and as for this:

Publius, the boy who technically speaking is nobody's grandson, but who will be theirs by upbringing.

I always forget that, about Lucius not really being Vorenus' son, although of course they never would, even if they don't let it change anything. And I thought that was sweet and fitting.

The bargaining was exactly what I expected from them-- although I was actually a bit worried for a moment. Augustus' And try keeping the heroics to a minimum here was a little bit of Octavian shining through, it seemed to me, and I liked it very much ( ... )

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mcicioni November 24 2007, 22:53:06 UTC
First of all, very much hope that you, your family and your sister have not been affected by yesterday's bushfires (wild fires ( ... )

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zebra363 January 24 2012, 14:28:57 UTC
His awkward fumblings in response had been received with a smile, fond rather than mocking: "I've never ..." " Of course you haven't." " We should stop." "Over my dead body."

The whole paragraph with the above line is beautiful!

I love the kiss on the night before they faced Caeser, too.

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mcicioni January 24 2012, 19:45:05 UTC
(smiles, warm with pleasure and gratitude)

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