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Fic: Eyes on Fire

Nov 24, 2008 00:34

Title: Eyes on Fire
Author: MaxineGray
Characters: Mohinder/Sylar, brief appearance of Peter, Nathan, Bennet and Matt
Rating: PG - 13
Summary: Sylar stalks Mohinder. Sylar kidnaps Mohinder. This is set in a non-season 3 verse.

Word Count: 1,900 (aprox)

Warnings: kidnapping ( Read more... )

heroes, fic, mohinder, sylar, mylar

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levitatethis November 24 2008, 16:22:11 UTC

This is a very interesting concept and I like how you played with it. Besides the fact that you did a really nice job of expanding on the characters as we know them (Mohinder's irritation with Sylar just showing up, moving beyond the fear he used to feel initially) I really love the idea of Sylar showing up at Mohinder's without a real plan in place. For some reason this connects with me in the vein of Mohinder as Sylar's weakness, his Achilles Heel, his blindspot. He almost can't help himself from seeking Mohinder out, seeking how he's doing, making sure to remind him how intertwined they really are.

This continues with Sylar kidnapping him but without the forethought as to what exactly he plans to do with Mohinder...it's an idea that comes about along the way. I also like that for all of Mohinder's annoyance with Sylar he also feels rightly panicked when the possibility of his own death crosses his mind.

Very interesting confrontation scene at the end and then Mohinder and Sylar having this entirely other conversation in the midst of it. And when Sylar realizes what's changed in terms of feelings that's what motivates him to resist the group instead of simply taking pleasure in the defiant taunting of them. You use small suggestions as to how much Sylar and Mohinder influence each other (Mohinder chiding him to not hurt any of them...Mohinder reflecting on how Sylar had come to mean more).

The end has this odd happy/disturbing ending to it. They're happy...but Mohinder has also been effectively cut off from everyone. In a way it kind of feels like Stockholm Syndrome.

Very cool story!

maxinegray November 24 2008, 21:06:13 UTC

Oh wow huge comment...

You must be the famous Levitatethis with their big ass comments. XD

And even though Sylar may look like he plans all his naughty stuff I know half of what he does is him just winging it. ;)

I love disturbing/odd endings... and I tried to make it as cheerful as I could... but I think it escaped me. Oh well. XD.

Thank you for reading!!

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