When you push the switch Chapter 4/?

[masuhisa]

Title: When you push the switch

Author: Masuhisa

Pairings: Ohmiya (main), Sakumiya, Junma

Summary: In the near future, the government has set a project to find out why teens commit suicide. Kids at the age of ten are sent to centers and given a switch which would kill them instantly when pressed. Only 4 of the thousands managed to survive,

Comments

[riapi]

waah~ no~ jun.,jun pressed the switch~ :(
aahh~ ohno is a bad guy, using psychological tactics to them.. waaah~ i think toma didn't press it, he just told a lie..
..ohno is so two-faced..

[masuhisa]

Ohno appears so Maou-ish in this :(
But he will turn good in the end, i promise!

[ecyojn]

Who was at the door?! Gaah!
Oh, this is getting me anxious!!

[mm_nani]

Umm...I know you're a good writer and that's why I will insert this tiny itty bitty criticism.

I felt that you rushed Jun's death just a little bit or maybe you just didn't want to over dramatize things and wanted to get over wit the story (which is progressing really nicely) which is okay but thought I should let you know it's shortcomings too.

Please ignore it if you wish because my own writing is utter crap and my views might be too ^^

[masuhisa]

Thanks for your feedback. I really appreciate critism :D
I was trying to finish this fic quickly, so it may seem rushed. (insert sheepish look)

[animesempaigirl]

Ohno is evil!!! No, he shouldn't be!!!! Ah, this story is making me want to know more. Update please!

Love the story thank you!!!

[fancyann1974]

ahhh not jun...mean ohno...nino get away from him
thank you for this story...off to read #4