My Daughter Jane 1/?
anonymous
August 26 2013, 05:27:38 UTC
Right so I'm going way, way out of my comfort zone since I'm more of a Quarian person. Hopefully this doesn't suck to bad. There will be eventual FShep/Garrus, but its going to be a while. ---- “Mommy what’s going on?” Jane asked as her mother scooped her up in her arms and ran out of their cabin.
“Shh… don’t worry Janey” Hannah replied as her daughter formed a death grip around her neck, “You remember a couple days ago the captain had us practice getting to the escape pods?”
“Yea…”
“Well it’s just like last time,” for a moment Hannah was extremely happy that Jane was only a child, because anyone else would have seen through her lie in an instant. “I’m going to put you in your seat, then I have to go help the captain ok?”
“Just bring Sir Pounce A lot back with you,” Jane asked as her mother sat her down in the escape pod that was primed and just waiting for the launch command. “I left him on the bed.”
“I will baby,” Hannah replied as the com unit in her ear started going haywire with reports that Batarian Pirates had boarded the ship. “You I know I love right Janey?” She asked suddenly, “More than anything in this galaxy I love you.”
Jane may have only been six, but she could tell from her mother’s emotions that something was wrong, and the sudden change in her voice filled her with fear for some unknown reason. “I love you to mommy.”
Hannah smiled as she knelt down to kiss her daughter on the forehead, “I hope you can forgive me for…” her voice was cut off a deafening roar and Jane’s screams of pure terror. She could tell that she’d been shot, the amount of blood pouring from her chest confirmed it, but she had no idea who had done so.
“Finish the cow off,” Hannah heard the gruff voice behind her and realized the Batarians had been moving faster than she thought, “and grab the girl, she’ll get a good price one we get back.”
Enraged at just the thought of Jane being enslaved Hannah shrugged off the pain and produced the pistol she’d been allowed to keep since she was a member of the ship’s security detail. “I’ll gut you before you touch a hair on her head!” she bellowed while spinning in a 180.
The ensuing gunfight was short lived as Hannah’s rounds impacted the Batarians chest, and the Batarians rounds hit her square in the abdomen. With her guts being held in by just the thinnest strip of skin, Hannah managed to stumble over to the control console of the escape pod and activated the launch protocol.
As her vision blurred she managed to select the first pre-programmed destination before her legs gave out and she crashed to the ground. “MOMMY!” Jane fought against the restraints of her seat to no avail.
“Janey,” Hannah said weakly as she made eye contact with her daughter, “Don’t worry baby,” her vision began to fade, “It’ll be o…” her voice trailed off as everything went dark.
“Mommy please…” Jane pleaded when she realized her mother wasn’t looking at her, “I’ll be good I promise,” she couldn’t hold back the tears as she begged her mother, “I’ll clean my room… I’ll eat my dinner... please don't go...” she whimpered while trying to think of what she could say that would cause her mother to wake up. It finally became too much and she began to cry uncontrollably as she watched her mother’s chest rise and fall for the final time.
Aw, you don't have to do anything like that! Multifilament are welcome, according to the rules up on the main post :( we're both free to write fills for it!
I really hope Aria!Mod doesn't delete this, because I really would love to read more of your writing, and I would love to see where you plan to take this story.
Like the other A!A stated, multifills are welcome on the kink meme, and I would enjoy reading yours and other A!A's writings on my prompt.
But I don't want to make you feel as if you have to write something you if do not wish to continue this, so the choice is yours.
Thank you once again for taking the time to write for my prompt. It really did make my day to see two fills for my prompt.
A!A, I can't even being to tell you how happy I was to check the kink meme and see that two amazing A!As have started to fill my prompt.
Having multifills for my one long prompt is like an early birthday present for me (My birthday is next week).
I can't even being to say how I grateful I am to you, and the other A!A for taking the time to write fills for my prompt.
I first posted this prompt in April, and then another anon posted it in the last thread, and yet it hadn't been filled yet.
And I didn't lose hope at all that some kind A!As would decide to fill my prompt.
Thank you A!A very much for an amazing start to what I know will
A!A, you have no idea how much it means to me to see this prompt being filled by two awesome A!As.
A!A, you really know how to bring out the emotions in me.
When I got the end of this first part (I'm not ashamed to admit)I had tears in my eyes.
The way you write Hannah and Jane really bring out the feels.
I should have known when I was prompting this prompt, that it would have a heartbreaking beginning.
I really enjoy the way you write Hannah. She is an amazing combination of a fierce soldier and a loving mother.
There was no way she would allow her daughter to be in the hands of Batarian slavers.
"Enraged at just the thought of Jane being enslaved Hannah shrugged off the pain and produced the pistol she’d been allowed to keep since she was a member of the ship’s security detail. “I’ll gut you before you touch a hair on her head!” she bellowed while spinning in a 180."
And Jane's promises to her mother to get her to wake up really did have me in tears. Her words tugged at my heart strings.
A!A, this is a really great start. Believe me when I tell you that it did not suck.
I want to thank you for writing this, and I appreciate you writing out of your comfort zone.
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“Mommy what’s going on?” Jane asked as her mother scooped her up in her arms and ran out of their cabin.
“Shh… don’t worry Janey” Hannah replied as her daughter formed a death grip around her neck, “You remember a couple days ago the captain had us practice getting to the escape pods?”
“Yea…”
“Well it’s just like last time,” for a moment Hannah was extremely happy that Jane was only a child, because anyone else would have seen through her lie in an instant. “I’m going to put you in your seat, then I have to go help the captain ok?”
“Just bring Sir Pounce A lot back with you,” Jane asked as her mother sat her down in the escape pod that was primed and just waiting for the launch command. “I left him on the bed.”
“I will baby,” Hannah replied as the com unit in her ear started going haywire with reports that Batarian Pirates had boarded the ship. “You I know I love right Janey?” She asked suddenly, “More than anything in this galaxy I love you.”
Jane may have only been six, but she could tell from her mother’s emotions that something was wrong, and the sudden change in her voice filled her with fear for some unknown reason. “I love you to mommy.”
Hannah smiled as she knelt down to kiss her daughter on the forehead, “I hope you can forgive me for…” her voice was cut off a deafening roar and Jane’s screams of pure terror. She could tell that she’d been shot, the amount of blood pouring from her chest confirmed it, but she had no idea who had done so.
“Finish the cow off,” Hannah heard the gruff voice behind her and realized the Batarians had been moving faster than she thought, “and grab the girl, she’ll get a good price one we get back.”
Enraged at just the thought of Jane being enslaved Hannah shrugged off the pain and produced the pistol she’d been allowed to keep since she was a member of the ship’s security detail. “I’ll gut you before you touch a hair on her head!” she bellowed while spinning in a 180.
The ensuing gunfight was short lived as Hannah’s rounds impacted the Batarians chest, and the Batarians rounds hit her square in the abdomen. With her guts being held in by just the thinnest strip of skin, Hannah managed to stumble over to the control console of the escape pod and activated the launch protocol.
As her vision blurred she managed to select the first pre-programmed destination before her legs gave out and she crashed to the ground. “MOMMY!” Jane fought against the restraints of her seat to no avail.
“Janey,” Hannah said weakly as she made eye contact with her daughter, “Don’t worry baby,” her vision began to fade, “It’ll be o…” her voice trailed off as everything went dark.
“Mommy please…” Jane pleaded when she realized her mother wasn’t looking at her, “I’ll be good I promise,” she couldn’t hold back the tears as she begged her mother, “I’ll clean my room… I’ll eat my dinner... please don't go...” she whimpered while trying to think of what she could say that would cause her mother to wake up. It finally became too much and she began to cry uncontrollably as she watched her mother’s chest rise and fall for the final time.
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Like the other A!A stated, multifills are welcome on the kink meme, and I would enjoy reading yours and other A!A's writings on my prompt.
But I don't want to make you feel as if you have to write something you if do not wish to continue this, so the choice is yours.
Thank you once again for taking the time to write for my prompt. It really did make my day to see two fills for my prompt.
I, personally, do hope you continue this fill.
Thank you once again A!A. :)
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Having multifills for my one long prompt is like an early birthday present for me (My birthday is next week).
I can't even being to say how I grateful I am to you, and the other A!A for taking the time to write fills for my prompt.
I first posted this prompt in April, and then another anon posted it in the last thread, and yet it hadn't been filled yet.
And I didn't lose hope at all that some kind A!As would decide to fill my prompt.
Thank you A!A very much for an amazing start to what I know will
A!A, you have no idea how much it means to me to see this prompt being filled by two awesome A!As.
A!A, you really know how to bring out the emotions in me.
When I got the end of this first part (I'm not ashamed to admit)I had tears in my eyes.
The way you write Hannah and Jane really bring out the feels.
I should have known when I was prompting this prompt, that it would have a heartbreaking beginning.
I really enjoy the way you write Hannah. She is an amazing combination of a fierce soldier and a loving mother.
There was no way she would allow her daughter to be in the hands of Batarian slavers.
"Enraged at just the thought of Jane being enslaved Hannah shrugged off the pain and produced the pistol she’d been allowed to keep since she was a member of the ship’s security detail. “I’ll gut you before you touch a hair on her head!” she bellowed while spinning in a 180."
And Jane's promises to her mother to get her to wake up really did have me in tears. Her words tugged at my heart strings.
A!A, this is a really great start. Believe me when I tell you that it did not suck.
I want to thank you for writing this, and I appreciate you writing out of your comfort zone.
I do hope you continue this.
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Also I really love the name Jane gave to her stuffed animal- "Sir Pounce A lot".
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But I also read this in connection to "To Ourselves and Our Posterity", the next thread, and I can easily imagine this is as a prologue to that story.
I'm going to enjoy both stories. So, keep on going.
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