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[masovampmonky]

life eh?
turkeyday good.
last of the reasearch paper done for good.
she is letting me turn it in today w007.
life aint so bad anymore i think.
love?

but the conclusion to my paper is

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[the_glass_jc]

Conclusion = lame. You = lamewad.

Not really. I actually have no opinion, but senseless bashing is fun.

sorry, found something else too...

[legendary_jerry]

it looks good. you really lay it on thick :p (which is the only way to survive college english)

a few suggestions:
Through and through, Oliver Twist carries the reader closer to the reality of the movers and shakers of the novel. With detailed imagery of clothing and surrounding areas, Charles Dickens opens the realm of London in its very Victorian Age society. The inner being of each character is opened by just a peep of their outfit (If only the real world worked so easily). In our great society, the oddest people make the best companions. A few words of advice: (;?) believe in love, have dinner with a stranger, and don’t never hold back the real reasons for anything.

also, change 'surrounding areas' to 'scenery'? (if that's what you mean) and i don't like the expression 'inner being,' but it works. i'd also change 'opened up' but i couldn't think of a suitable suggestion.