An X-Men Sue... Ah, again with the freakin' wings!
I decided to report on myself. I've got a few Sue fics floating around the Pit of Voles that I haven't removed yet (God knows why not). I figure, either I'm not as bad I think or I've just flown under the radar. Anyway, I had to report on Michaela. As much as I still think there's hope for her, the current incarnation in inexcusable.
Story Or Series Title: The Stranger Things series ("Keeping Faith", "Ace's High", "Masks" and "Certain Point of View")
Fandom: X-Men movieverse
Culprit Author's Name: Mina-Clare Moseley (me)
Full Name (plus titles if any): Dr. Michaela St. Matthews
Full Species(es): Human/Mutant
Hair Color (include adjectives): Strawberry Blond (which she does admit is dyed)
Eye Color (include adjectives): Blue
Unusual Markings/Colorations: As has been said before, f***ing wings.
Special Possessions (if any): A crucifix which she gives to Logan
Annoying Origin: Maine
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Gets a job as therapist at Xavier's School for Gifted Mutant. Eventually bangs Logan.
Annoying Special Abilities: Empath. Able to fly. Bangs Logan.
Other Annoying Traits: Did I mention she bangs Logan? Calls Xavier "Charles". Gets into a battle of wits with Gambit and wins. Comforts Rogue.
Notes: If I did her now, she would be *so* much different. In restrospect, she was a character with a good base that got lost under unneeded mutations (Cough*Wings!*Cough) and other things. I still think the idea of an empathic mutant therapist is a good idea for X-Men ('cause, let's face it... Those people need help!)
Really, on the scale of Mary Sues, she's probably on the low end. There's just a lot of stuff I wish I didn't do in retrospect. Mostly, the dumbass wings. I just wanted to have the joke about a winged mutant who was afraid of heights. This is a character I would like to save, I thought I needed to report her before I cleansed her.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
"I can't do this, Wolverine," she murmurs. With that, Mika fled the gym.
Wolverine. Mika never calls me Wolverine. It's always "Logan". I saw it in her eyes. I scared her. I have never scared Mika. She's been pissed off at me, but the fear in her eyes sent chills down my spine.
I take off quickly after her. She's been in my sight since I started the pursuit. It won't take me long to catch her. I'm a hell of a good tracker, and Mika's not that hot when it comes to running.
I grip her wrist and spin her around. Tears are streaming down her reddened cheeks. "How could you do that?!?!" she demands. "It's not fair!"
"I kissed ya," I retort. "Because I wanted to! I want you, Michaela! Haven't I made that clear yet?" I pull her close, my look softening. "I've wanted ya since the moment I saw ya."
"I want you too!" Mika cries. "You make me feel things I've never felt before, and it scares me!"
I hold her close, stroking her wings. They twitch in responce. "Michaela.... I...."
She turns her head up, looking into my eyes. As if in slow motion, she moves towards me. I feel her lips brush mine. It's like I jammed my hand in an electrical socket. Mika has never kissed me before. I've always kissed her. It's feels... Incredible. There's a million emotions, sensations, rushing through my body. I need to have her close. I rumble, lifting her into my arms, trailing my kisses down her neck.
"Darlin', I need you," I state firmly. I bury my face in her flesh, taking in her sweet scents. "Let me have you."
She has her eyes shut as she nods. I lick my lips, growling low in my throat.
She's trembling as I take her to my room. I know damn well that Mika is a virgin. It's been a long time since I've deflowered someone. Now that I think about it.... I don't know if I've ever been with a virgin.
I go to lay Mika on my bed. She shakes her head. "It'll hurt my wings."
"Okay." I flop down on the bed, pulling her with me. She sits on my stomach, body stiff and unyielding.
"Don't be nervous," I murmur, unbuttoning her blouse. I explore the newly exposed flesh. Mika gives a moan, her fingers digging into me. I've waited eight months for this moment. The moment where I could finally show her how beautiful she is.
Shauna Riley is also probably bordering on Sue-ness, but I'm not reporting her, since I still like her for some odd reason.
~Mina
Story Or Series Title: The Stranger Things series ("Keeping Faith", "Ace's High", "Masks" and "Certain Point of View")
Fandom: X-Men movieverse
Culprit Author's Name: Mina-Clare Moseley (me)
Full Name (plus titles if any): Dr. Michaela St. Matthews
Full Species(es): Human/Mutant
Hair Color (include adjectives): Strawberry Blond (which she does admit is dyed)
Eye Color (include adjectives): Blue
Unusual Markings/Colorations: As has been said before, f***ing wings.
Special Possessions (if any): A crucifix which she gives to Logan
Annoying Origin: Maine
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Gets a job as therapist at Xavier's School for Gifted Mutant. Eventually bangs Logan.
Annoying Special Abilities: Empath. Able to fly. Bangs Logan.
Other Annoying Traits: Did I mention she bangs Logan? Calls Xavier "Charles". Gets into a battle of wits with Gambit and wins. Comforts Rogue.
Notes: If I did her now, she would be *so* much different. In restrospect, she was a character with a good base that got lost under unneeded mutations (Cough*Wings!*Cough) and other things. I still think the idea of an empathic mutant therapist is a good idea for X-Men ('cause, let's face it... Those people need help!)
Really, on the scale of Mary Sues, she's probably on the low end. There's just a lot of stuff I wish I didn't do in retrospect. Mostly, the dumbass wings. I just wanted to have the joke about a winged mutant who was afraid of heights. This is a character I would like to save, I thought I needed to report her before I cleansed her.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
"I can't do this, Wolverine," she murmurs. With that, Mika fled the gym.
Wolverine. Mika never calls me Wolverine. It's always "Logan". I saw it in her eyes. I scared her. I have never scared Mika. She's been pissed off at me, but the fear in her eyes sent chills down my spine.
I take off quickly after her. She's been in my sight since I started the pursuit. It won't take me long to catch her. I'm a hell of a good tracker, and Mika's not that hot when it comes to running.
I grip her wrist and spin her around. Tears are streaming down her reddened cheeks. "How could you do that?!?!" she demands. "It's not fair!"
"I kissed ya," I retort. "Because I wanted to! I want you, Michaela! Haven't I made that clear yet?" I pull her close, my look softening. "I've wanted ya since the moment I saw ya."
"I want you too!" Mika cries. "You make me feel things I've never felt before, and it scares me!"
I hold her close, stroking her wings. They twitch in responce. "Michaela.... I...."
She turns her head up, looking into my eyes. As if in slow motion, she moves towards me. I feel her lips brush mine. It's like I jammed my hand in an electrical socket. Mika has never kissed me before. I've always kissed her. It's feels... Incredible. There's a million emotions, sensations, rushing through my body. I need to have her close. I rumble, lifting her into my arms, trailing my kisses down her neck.
"Darlin', I need you," I state firmly. I bury my face in her flesh, taking in her sweet scents. "Let me have you."
She has her eyes shut as she nods. I lick my lips, growling low in my throat.
She's trembling as I take her to my room. I know damn well that Mika is a virgin. It's been a long time since I've deflowered someone. Now that I think about it.... I don't know if I've ever been with a virgin.
I go to lay Mika on my bed. She shakes her head. "It'll hurt my wings."
"Okay." I flop down on the bed, pulling her with me. She sits on my stomach, body stiff and unyielding.
"Don't be nervous," I murmur, unbuttoning her blouse. I explore the newly exposed flesh. Mika gives a moan, her fingers digging into me. I've waited eight months for this moment. The moment where I could finally show her how beautiful she is.
Shauna Riley is also probably bordering on Sue-ness, but I'm not reporting her, since I still like her for some odd reason.
~Mina