School Project [Chapter 6/?]
Title: School Project [Chapter 6/?]
Author: mariposa02
Pairing: Onkey
Rating: pg - 13
Genre: comedy, drama?
Summery: the "klutz" and the "ice prince" have to do a school projekt together.
AN: I give up I'm just unable to write long chapters...I hope that it's okay... and since tomorrow the weekend is over I probably wont be able to write or update for the next ( Read more... )
Author: mariposa02
Pairing: Onkey
Rating: pg - 13
Genre: comedy, drama?
Summery: the "klutz" and the "ice prince" have to do a school projekt together.
AN: I give up I'm just unable to write long chapters...I hope that it's okay... and since tomorrow the weekend is over I probably wont be able to write or update for the next ( Read more... )
..at first i thought this fic would just take like not that long.. so i was a bit intruiged by the whole thing that it reached chapter when the synopsis was just about a school project that when they're done the story would end too, but i guess i was wrong..but not that i didn't like it..so yeah..^-^..
..like i always do..i'll start with JINKI.. i loved how you made him somewhat more human like, sure i think everyone who knows him would agree that he's the happy type of person (well that is in front of the camera, after all the internet is the closest thing i have as medium to somehow reach them so i really don't know, but really i don't intend on offending anyone, with my statement..so if ever i did..i'm really sorry...), cause almost all stories i've read, JINKI is always the gentleman the lovable the sweet and the type of person that you would find yourself being drawn to in an instant..so here you wrote him like a human being, cause we all know that no matter how positive a person is, he would still feel pain hurt sadness and even anger..that only proved that he's normal, despite being a "klutz" and all...i also love the part or more the line where KIBUM thought for the first time that JINKI is really older than him, it's like seeing JINKI that way somehow woke him up from his fanatacy that JINKI is somewhat younger, and that they're in the same age..that part was really good it gave a more positive factor for JINKI...but the eyebags ..made me think like...'poor JINKI, he's body feels tired, and to put on top of it all, his heart and mind is so confused'.. but none the less i still like it..and yeah the way he kissed KIBUM again after KIBUM kissed him was really cute..and somehow created a whole new atmosphere to the scene, and was able to change into a more complex atmosphere, that seems so sweet and all romantice, thing going on, but as the same not being plain as romantic, but somewhere, just in between the lines, it feels like there is something more going on...which i really find good in your story...it's not just overly romantic, but there's something more about it..but i just can't find my tongue for the right word...^-^..and also i was able to see the other side of JINKI, his mature side, and having this dominant aura than KIBUM, the 'ice prince'..^-^
..and now about KIBUM, i love how he seems to be so distant to almost everyone, but just can't find any reason on why he seems to get drawn to JINKI with just a short time, i love how he eased his troubling head, and also his heart, by dancing, feeling every beat wash away every worry he has,,(just like showering for JINKI that is)..and also how his heart can feel the warmness brought by JINKI, through the cold ice walls surrounding his heart that locks up evey feelings and emotion deep in his heart. and also i love the part where reality seems to washed some facts to him, that he really needs to know..and the way he shut JINKI up by kissing him, and also went on apologizing to him, cause that is really the reason why he's in there in the first place..^-^
.. and yeah the part or maybe the cahpter where me as a reader found out that JINKI and KIBUM.. really did have history back then, made me realized that maybe they didn't fall in love within a short time, but they already did, they just didn't realized it up until now..^-^..
..i should probably end it here, before i ended up adding things that doesn't have any sense at all..
~akap akap~ (hug hug)
.take care.
*peace out*
PS: sorry again for not dropping a comment for the last chappie..
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and I'm sorry but I'm the same as you and at the moment reaaally busy with school and exems so I couldn't update this weekend like I wanted to... but I'll update next weekend promise ♥
thanks♥
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