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The Daily Poem - Week 3

Aug 20, 2011 11:12

And another week of blitherings, slightly more blitherish this week, as it really was an exceptionally hectic week at work. It's really hard to write poetry when people are walking into your office asking you to join them on a call ( Read more... )

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shirebound August 20 2011, 19:24:01 UTC

#7 is truly moving. And this... love it!

The cool, quiet corridors are
populated with representatives of the gentler sex.
We alone are out tonight
in our quiet numbers
in our quiet strength
Women
Enjoying the evening air.

mariole August 21 2011, 14:09:51 UTC

Thank you. "Ritual" feels so private; I guess I'm getting braver about sharing the real me.

The Sisterhood evening was a cool experience. :)

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mariole August 21 2011, 14:11:47 UTC

Thanks so much, Julia. The poems feel as if they're getting more personal-- to personal? But I think it's time to really share some thoughts. Thank you for reading, you sweet and encouraging soul.

gilli_ann August 21 2011, 10:54:09 UTC

These are lovely, Mariole. Each and every One of them. Finding such meaning, reflection and insights in everday occurrences, memories, books..... What a gift of observation and interpretation you have. For some reason these days I am especially bound to the down-to-earth, the mundane that comes with meaning, so when all is said and done, I think I enjoyed nothing as much as this;

This is the gift of flowers.
You really can't screw it up.

This little observation made me strangely happy and contented. Wishing you a lovely day and week, and for more poems to emerge!

mariole August 21 2011, 14:17:30 UTC

Aw, Maeglian, thank you. That's the challenge of the daily poem-- finding something to put a bit of meaning to every single day. It's opened up my senses and my alertness; made me more thoughtful about events as I wonder, "Can this be a poem?"

The flowers made me insanely happy. I really loved that about your place-- the flowers all in their pots, being bold and pretty and happy. I'm so grateful for those little things that really give life its beauty.

Having a nice quiet weekend. Yesterday I read "The Help," a novel about maids in the South during the Civil Rights movement. I'd heard some controversy about it, but I felt it was fairly balanced. Today I'm going on a hike up one of my favorite trails-- it's high, over 10,000 feet, so we want to get there before the snow closes it. It's been an odd year, with such a last Spring the high country has been open only a little while. It soothes me.

Best to you and all there. You're never far from my thoughts.

gilli_ann August 21 2011, 14:57:47 UTC

Have a lovely hike. Nature is a great comforter and inspirator. And thank you for the words about my flowers -I've had some very lovely potted roses this summer but I fear they're bring neglected at the moment.

I've had some opportunty to read though, so I just finished reading "to kill a mockingbird" - hadn' read it before nor seen the film. I did finding it charming and sad, very sad - but most of all I finding myself i'll equipped to fully comprehend and identify with what that society, thos class and race distinctions were really like for those who loved there.... it seems so unfamiliar, even alien. I wonder whether I'd be feeling the same, reading "the help"?

gilli_ann August 21 2011, 14:59:46 UTC

...that was supposed to be "I'm finding myself ill equipped to....."

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addie71 August 21 2011, 12:33:07 UTC

"Unbroken" and "Ritual" moved me very much.
"Absolute Fail" made me smile.
Lovely work, all.

mariole August 21 2011, 14:07:58 UTC

Thanks, Addie. :)

mechtild August 23 2011, 13:09:10 UTC

Good work again, Mariole. I especially liked "Scent" (I could SEE, SMELL that lavendar, HEAR those bees) and "Forced". The contrast between the experience of being in the traffic, all metal and artificial surfaces and smells and confined, tight places, time compressed even as it is wasted, and the release of climbing into the open, natural, free and fragrant, where there is no time yet all the time in the world, you did so well. I hope some day you can live more of your life in that part of your environment. I do not hope you will get out of the wheels and grind all together, since it may be that the contrast is what makes your descriptions of being in the natural world so intoxicating. I also loved the ending you crafted for "Sisters", and might have quoted what Shirebound quoted, but I think the ending wouldn't be what it is if you hadn't led us readers there first. "Unbroken" seemed close to your heart, but I thought it would have presented better, more powerfully as prose. I kept waiting for it to transition from ( ... )

mariole August 25 2011, 03:13:47 UTC

> the experience of being in the traffic, all metal and artificial surfaces and smells and confined, tight places, time compressed even as it is wasted

Wow, YES! So wonderfully said. That's exactly it; "time compressed even as it is wasted" -- you should be a poet! :)

I agree with you 100% on "Unbroken". It was even less a poem the first time through. It really ought to be prose. But that's what came out on the day. Perhaps it will turn into something better over time. The important thing was to get a poem out. It's really a great exercise. Feel free to join me!