"Unintended" Luke/Mara

[lotusflower85]

Title: Unintended
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Characters: Luke/Mara
Summary:  I’ll be there as soon as I can - but I’m busy mending broken pieces of the life I had before.
A/N:  Inspired/based on the song "Unintended" by Muse.

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When they first met, neither of them had been ready.  She had spent her nights dreaming of his death at her hands, but had

Comments

[gabri_jade]

Simply lovely. This is a really nice way to explore the way their relationship changed in all those subtle ways before the big change of their Force melding. I like the pacing, and there are lots of specifics that jump out at me here in their eloquence and accuracy.

Her pale face and dark shadows that clung to her eyes did not escape his attention but he ignored it, because every pore of her was pleading with him to do so. He talked, and she presented not to listen, every sentence made her grip her cup a bit tighter, made her shoulders tighten a bit further.

Eventually she spoke. “Not the silent type then, Skywalker?”

This makes me laugh. I can just see the scene - Mara very quiet and starting to hunch ever more forward, with Luke chattering away, trying to be considerate. It's all the more amusing that when he stops to think about it, he knows perfectly well that he doesn't really talk that much. :P

He fell in love quite unexpectedly - and Callista was everything he thought he wanted. In many ways, she was just like him, and perhaps ultimately that was part of the problem. Although he regretted the breakdown of their relationship, she was a very important aspect of his life, if only that she taught him he deserved to be loved.

I like this because it acknowledges the importance Callista had. A lot of the old L/M fics would cast her as an undeniable villain, using derogatory phrases like "bodysnatcher". Well, I think Luke should have been with Mara, too, but badmouthing Callista doesn't change anything, and to downplay the importance of that relationship is to ultimately devalue Luke and Mara's own. Luke learned and changed because of that relationship, which helped make him the man Mara fell in love with and married. Real life is like that. Nice to see a fic address the matter so realistically.

Luke smiled wryly. “So you thought you’d give me a friendly kick in the teeth back?”

Hee. Very in character.

Beautifully done - and I still love this line:

He had given up on love - she just didn’t believe in it.

Great stuff. :D

[lotusflower85]

Thank you!

I like this because it acknowledges the importance Callista had. A lot of the old L/M fics would cast her as an undeniable villain, using derogatory phrases like "bodysnatcher". Well, I think Luke should have been with Mara, too, but badmouthing Callista doesn't change anything, and to downplay the importance of that relationship is to ultimately devalue Luke and Mara's own.

I agree (although I probably have been guilty of demonising her in past fic :D) I think Callista was very important in Luke's growth and getting him to the point where he was ready for love and a relationship. He did love her - and she wasn't a horrible person for leaving him - she just saw things the way they were and ultimately, it worked out for the best.

So glad you liked this!