Red Star Resort - scrap that!

[manchester_red]

I've just found a second draft with a prologue that I rather like. So . . as you were.

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[_whee_]

Dinosaurs and Pluto, I think I love you! :P

[manchester_red]

I'm afraid it only goes downhill from there *l*

[ampheebian]

Now /this/ is a beautiful introduction to a world... or universe, if you like... You've got nice movement between ideas, but also linger enough on each to get something fresh and then shift on. I like this well over the other *nodnod*. I think this, like your satirical work, stretches your humour legs really aptly, brings out your voice well - and your personal tendency for randomisms - without sounding contrived. A nice partnership *nodnod*.

and yes, Pluto and dinosaurs = amazing.