A special thank you goes out once again to danglingdingle , for inspiring, encouraging and perfecting my words. Oh, and putting up with my flights of fancy.
Will has to adjust to many things in this story, none of them will be easy. One thing he does know and love, is the swordsmithing. At least he can lose himself in work for the time being.
Glad to see you are enjoying the story, I have another chapter coming soon.
i can't stand the word 'grin' being flogged and over used.it annoys me greatly.fiquetAugust 29 2009, 15:17:16 UTC
Very enjoyable.Am waiting for more! however, one little note; please, please stop using the verb 'grinned/grin' when describing Jack's smile.I DO realise that it is a particularly good way of describing it,generally, but he doesn't ALWAYS grin! remember also: 'grin' has a strong connotation of 'idot' attached to it,- and i doubt that you want to cast Jack into the 'grinning idiot' role all that often.
Re: i can't stand the word 'grin' being flogged and over used.it annoys me greatly.danglingdingleAugust 29 2009, 19:42:13 UTC
Oh, hai! It's the inept beta reader here again, with a bag of explanations as to why Jack grins a plenty, instead of smiling, smirking, sneering, or, heaven help me, simpering.
The word 'grin' is an interesting one, since there really isn't a good substitute for it. In fact, it is often written that 'Jack flashed his habitual grin,' which annoys me greatly, but does indeed serve a valid purpose in saving the readers from even more repetitiveness; They aren't inflicted with having to read the detailed descriptions about the character's appearance, gestures nor attitude, since everyone already knows all about that by heart. Otherwise I doubt they'd be reading PotC fanfiction in the first place
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Re: i can't stand the word 'grin' being flogged and over used.it annoys me greatly.fiquetAugust 30 2009, 05:12:14 UTC
Ah, thank you for the tour through the Gallery of Grins- I must admit that I have profound respect for you and mamazano because you are so thorough and so honest with everything you write. It is obvious that your delightful pieces are not borne of just self-indulgent fantasy. Thank you for that.
Peace is what we hope for all our heroes, isn't it? But then, it can often require peace to be able to recognize it.
Through it all, Jack seems to have found his, with enough security to know when someone else might be barking up the wrong mast... as it were.
On the other hand, maybe Jack can only recognize it when it's the same as he enjoys. Some men can be that way.
You've handled Will with such a lovely depth and understanding. In many ways, he's more difficult to understand Jack, but perhaps that's because Will is still in flux, where Jack has both feet firmly on the deck, well-formed in every way (**smile** Sorry, had a moment there.)
Eh-hem! Back to Will. It would seem he's made his deal... and probably with the devil, dressed in several suits.
When everything you think you know is taken away from you, peace can be a hard thing to locate. And it has to come from within, as you make peace with yourself for the choices you have made.
I think Jack recognizes this, that Will needs to find out what it is he truly wants. Jack does have the edge, being quite a bit older and hopefully wiser.
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Here's hoping the whelp will discover whatever it is he needs most.
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Thanks for reading!
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Glad to see you are enjoying the story, I have another chapter coming soon.
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however, one little note; please, please stop using the verb 'grinned/grin' when describing Jack's smile.I DO realise that it is a particularly good way of describing it,generally, but he doesn't ALWAYS grin!
remember also: 'grin' has a strong connotation of 'idot' attached to it,- and i doubt that you want to cast Jack into the 'grinning idiot' role all that often.
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Though I will say, Jack does grin like an idiot on occasion, when it suits his purpose.
Thank you for the con crit, and hope you continue to enjoy the story.
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The word 'grin' is an interesting one, since there really isn't a good substitute for it. In fact, it is often written that 'Jack flashed his habitual grin,' which annoys me greatly, but does indeed serve a valid purpose in saving the readers from even more repetitiveness; They aren't inflicted with having to read the detailed descriptions about the character's appearance, gestures nor attitude, since everyone already knows all about that by heart. Otherwise I doubt they'd be reading PotC fanfiction in the first place ( ... )
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Through it all, Jack seems to have found his, with enough security to know when someone else might be barking up the wrong mast... as it were.
On the other hand, maybe Jack can only recognize it when it's the same as he enjoys. Some men can be that way.
You've handled Will with such a lovely depth and understanding. In many ways, he's more difficult to understand Jack, but perhaps that's because Will is still in flux, where Jack has both feet firmly on the deck, well-formed in every way (**smile** Sorry, had a moment there.)
Eh-hem! Back to Will. It would seem he's made his deal... and probably with the devil, dressed in several suits.
Good stuff! A pleasure to see the saga unfold.
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I think Jack recognizes this, that Will needs to find out what it is he truly wants. Jack does have the edge, being quite a bit older and hopefully wiser.
Appreciate your support, in everything.
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