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malruniel11

Prompt #48 - Over

Jan 20, 2012 01:20

It's over. After eighteen months of pokes, prods, invasions, treatments and side effects, she has faded into a shell of her former self. They say there's nothing left to do. All that remains is a drying out husk that faintly resembles the woman I've lived my life for. She's not there anymore. She can't respond to my hand holding hers; she doesn't ( Read more... )

prompt #48, ljscribe, over, this is the way the world ends

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wow! anonymous January 20 2012, 18:50:46 UTC

That was amazing Othella! Did you get the i's and t's backward on purpose? Or was that a typo? Email me sometime. I'd like to hear how your christmas trip went and what classes you are taking this semester, or if you would like to get together sometime.

Re: wow! malruniel11 January 20 2012, 20:38:17 UTC

Thank you, anonymous person! Yes, the t's and i's are backwards on purpose to further express the collapse of the world around this unfortunate man.

I would love to e-mail you and tell you about things, possibly even get together sometime, but I don't know who you are. If you let me know, we can work on that.

sweeny_todd January 21 2012, 05:05:21 UTC

I really like this (in a teary sort of way)- the short sentences really get that pain across. so very moving.

malruniel11 January 21 2012, 07:44:01 UTC

Thank you. It breaks my heart a bit, too. After I wrote it, though the circumstances are different, it does remind me a bit of how my grandfather watched my grandmother die. They were young when that happened, though, and I assume that my characters are elderly.