Naruto Fic: ANBU, Chapter 1

[maldoror_gw]

Here it is! Askerian's pleas for ficcage (and her promise to roll over ^_^) squeezed the last few paragraphs out of my bunnies. Enjoy! This is the first time for me that Sasuke has actually appeared in a serious fic of mine, so feedback on his character, behaviour etc. is much appreciated

Comments

like, woah

[lorelei76]

Is it any wonder that you are one of my favorite authors, ever? The breadth of your talent is in-freakin'-credible. You bring the readers along on a crazy mindtrip, and leave us begging for more, wondering what the hell is going to happen next. It's even better that you flesh out the supporting characters like Ibiki as beautifully as you do the main players - so that going back to watching the anime and reading the manga suddenly has layers upon layers of subtext. You, dear author, RULE.

Re: like, woah

[artimusdin]

I would like to add my support behind this statement with a "Hear, hear!" and "Damned straight!"

Re: like, woah

[maldoror_gw]

Wheee! I rule!! Thanks ^_^ *blushies*

I gotta admit, I've always liked Ibiki, and he seems to be taking on bigger parts in this fic than anticipated. But I think that works. Next chapter should be Sasuke-Naruto, and Sasuke-Kakashi; I'll see if I can nail them down well too. Whew, lotsa work ahead...

[elfiepike]

i would ask you to stop being so awesome, but i wouldn't be the only one suffering if you did. the way sasuke is still in the past about naruto, how he knows nothing of how naruto has changed--i really like that. a lot. just his whole narrative voice. (it's like, we know right off the bat that he's not going to be an unreliable narrator so much as one with a very particular point of view.)

also, i really want to know what naruto's first mask was. like woah.

eeee, this is awesome.

[maldoror_gw]

it's like, we know right off the bat that he's not going to be an unreliable narrator so much as one with a very particular point of view.

Word. Sasuke is trying to filter everything through his obsession of revenge. The problem (for him and for me, the author) is that he can't do it all the time, which means the view of the narration is going to be changeable. Headaches ahead for me, to make that obvious to the readers...^^;

Glad you like it! We'll learn about Naruto's mask in the next chapter.

[admantius]

I don't know what it is about the ANBU, but I'm completely infatuated with them. Probably has something to do with the mystery of not knowing who they are, or perhaps it's those really cool out fits. I dunno. But you certainly capture the escence of them, and I can't wait until the next part. So excited!

[maldoror_gw]

It's the cool outfits. Garanteed.

I mean, there's a coloured pic of Kakashi in Anbu uniform with his nin-dogs in one of the manga's Specials, and I spent looooong minutes staring at it and then I went and wrote Descent and started writing this fic too. So yeah, definitely the outfits :P Glad you liked the chapter!

[d2ragnarok]

You write a very excellent Sasuke. I'm not really surprised, since you could probably write any character with minimum OOC-ness. I've been craving for something serious and dark about Sasuke. The fact that it's not so over-angsted really draws in those brownie points, since I class Sasuke as Grade-A Emo. =D I'm just amazed, dude. But that's just usual, when I read something of yours. *awaits next chapters for ANBU and Diplomatic Relations*

[maldoror_gw]

Glad you're amazed! Wheee, brownie points!

It would be very, very easy to turn any Sasuke-POV fic into an emo-machine of major proportions. I'm going to try to avoid that, mainly because it's not really my style. There will be angst, it's unavoidable, but hopefully there'll be some morbid, dry humour and action to balance out Puppy's angstiness :P

[silverkiiri]

Dear God, I love you, woman. ::chews on your arm:: Is there ever a time when you don't write like a goddess? I LOVE this fic. I've always like Sasuke, the little emo bastard. ::fond smile:: I like his denial about Naruto, and the ... you know what. Ignore what I just said and put "everything" in it's place. I'm enthralled. More is good. More soon is... well, a lot to ask for, but even better.

::lurve::

[maldoror_gw]

Lol, I don't know about the 'soon', but I do hope to work on the 'more'. I must admit, Sasuke and I have a difficult author-subject relationship, but that little angsty glare of his does make me melt. Come on, Puppy, do it again! *snicker*

Glad you're enthralled! ^_~