Zenith Chapter Twenty-three - Intentions

[majestamoniet]

Sorry about the delay, folks. I had midterms last week and had to deal with a nasty computer virus at the start of this one.  I still, however, plan to have chapter Twenty-four up by the 21st.

Title: Zenith
Author: Majesta Moniet
Rating: Mature
Pairing: Edward/Bella/Jacob
Summary: At a pivotal moment in New Moon, a simple choice alters the course of

Comments

[majestamoniet]

Thank you! I try really hard to lead the characters through realistic development, but there's nothing I can do to alter the more deeply-rooted personality traits. So yeah, Bella's not just going to be over Edward because she's with Jake. But she didn't throw herself at his feet either. Like in the books, everyone involved knows that she has true feelings for both men.

Haha, it was really nice getting a chance to write the pack because the characters don't have much depth/development in the books so I had a lot more room to work with and could take more liberties with their personalities. It's been a blast.

It's interesting that you mentioned enjoying the fluffier chapters at the beginning. Most them weren't planned. Really. When I started writing this story, I expected for Edward to return around chapter eight and for the transformation to occur just a few chapters after that. But I found that I needed more time to get Bella and Jacob's relationship to where I wanted it. Plus, I REALLY enjoyed writing those scenes.

Unfortunately, since I started in on more of the non-romantic plot I think I've lost some readership. A lot of the people who were with me in the beginning have dropped off the radar, and I think it's because they were after more of the fluffy stuff. I miss them. :(

But, I'm also picking up new readers like you with every chapter. And that's awesome.

Don't worry about Bella turning into Super Woman or anything. As much as some of my readers would love to become some sort of kick-ass powerhouse, that's just really not in her character, and it doesn't fit the parameters of this story.

Thank you so much for dropping in and leaving me some feedback! It's much appreciated.

[cee_ly]

"So yeah, Bella's not just going to be over Edward because she's with Jake. But she didn't throw herself at his feet either." And thaaaaank you for that! It was already enough fail in New Moon to see her take him back without ever confronting him, really, about what he did. Their relationship is, to me, so unhealthy it drives me crazy! I read some comments you left where you said something like that Bella could be angry with Jacob while she just suppressed her emotions or got "dazzled" with Edward, and that it was better. Well amen sister! How can a relationship evolve or be balanced if one controls the other, consciously or not? Aaaarh, it's so frustrating! I'm sorry if I ramble but it's just that I don't know anyone in RL who's interested enough in Twilight to talk about this (in Belgium it's not really as popular as it seems to be in the US, or others countries for that matter). So when I find some way to vent, I jump on the occasion XD

The pack is so much win! I've never quite really understood how SMeyer could create such amazing characters as the Quileutes, and fail on sooo many other points. They seem just more natural, more reliable and funny than the other characters.

I think it's a good thing you slowed the story down because it makes Bella and Jacob's relationship stronger and more believable. If Edward had come back earlier I think it would have been less believable that Bella stayed with Jacob. But even if fluff is love, only fluff tends to get boring if nothing happens. And like I said your story has the advantage of having an original plot, so kuddos to you :)

It's good to know she won't be a Super Woman ;) I really dislike "Mary Sues" XD It's more interesting to see her struggle than suddenly become super strong and everything will be okay then. It will be an interesting change though to see her not depend on men for her protection :)

No problem :) I don't usually review (I'm veeery picky when it comes to fanfiction), but I just had to ^^ I hope it's intelligible because English is not my mother language so I kind of struggle with some sentence structures XD

[majestamoniet]

Don't apologize. I love discussing Twilight. :)

Yeah, I don't SM developed the pack that much because she never even meant to develop JACOB that much. I don't think she ever had the intention of so many fans preferring the wolves to the Cullens.

You're English skills are very impressive. If you hadn't told me it isn't her first language, I would have never guessed. Thank you so much for doing something you usually wouldn't and commenting on my story. That means sooooo much to me. :D