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maevebran

Waking Up from The Dead (part 1)

Dec 30, 2011 21:14

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jedibuttercup December 31 2011, 09:36:41 UTC

Interesting! There were a few typos you'll want to catch before posting it elsewhere, but the story itself is great; I want to know what happens next.

maevebran January 3 2012, 01:02:11 UTC

I fixed the two I could find. Part 2 is up. Part 3 is being written and it is looking to be 5 or 6 parts of 1700 words each before it is finished. yeesh. I can't believe I'm writting this.=) (You wanted to see me write some more fanfic so I guess you get your wish.)

jedibuttercup January 3 2012, 01:57:49 UTC

Here are the two that still stick out to me:

> “You’ve been a sleep, Cap’” Colonel Fury’s voice rattled around Steven Roger’s head.

Asleep should be one word; also, you need a comma after the word Cap.

> “My Aunt helped mouth ball this place,” the female agent said from the doorway.

It should be mothball, one word, no u. *grin*

maevebran January 3 2012, 04:42:36 UTC

Got it. Fixed both here and at Ao3=) Thanks.