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[madradio921]

My Into the Wild essay, decent if nothing else. havn't really read it through either :)

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[madradio921]

oh, and the title's not title, it's Chris McCandless

[karios]

This is *excellent*

I have a couple minor copy-editing things
Franz discovered Chris’s death from two hitchhikers; it struck him so much that when he learned what happened he “renounced the Lord… I decided I couldn’t believe in a God who would let something that terrible happen to a boy like [Chris]” (60). Chris’s influence over others was greater than he would ever know.

Here you needed a bridge between "hitchhikers" and "it," "Lord" needed capitalization, and "is" should probably be "was."

Aside from that stuff, this is a really well-written and well-executed argument. Great job. I'm impressed :)

[karios]

forgot to say that I fixed the errors myself in the quote, figured you'd know but thought I'd say anyway

[madradio921]

thanks as always :)

[elmo5]

sweetie, it's breezee

dude, i love copy editing, if you ever need it done, let me do it for you!

but nice job, very straightforward, you can tell you read the book

[madradio921]

thanks for breezee's name, i always forget :) feel free to copy edit any essay or school thing i post here, always appreciated!