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;_; Thank you.machitobayeSeptember 2 2009, 04:28:17 UTC
Okay! ;_; My first crit, and it's such good crit. <3
1) Yes, the age thing was a mistake on my part. Admittedly, the error makes no difference in terms of the information, because he doesn't exactly grow much between 14 and 15, but I'll go fix that anyway.
2) You're absolutely right, and that's one thing I've always had trouble communicating... and something I really do need help with. To be honest, 'liar' Machi is the Machi from the game for the most part, but tempered a bit by experience in jail and the difficulties that come from learning who Lamiroir (and Trucy and Apollo) really are. He is, however, still... well, emotional, and while I have admittedly been limited in situations that would let me try to exercise his emotional responses in a positive light, I'm slowly trying to tackle this one at Dollsy--albeit really poorly. (It started with Anna, actually, whose situation I flailed through a lot, but he rescued Yukimi at Dollsy because Yukimi had helped him and tried to work with him previously.... this was tempered by a lot of guilt and internal conflict however, in part because of the lack of forethought that went into the decision.) And survival, to me, also seems like the sort of thing that would instinctively trump his sentiments--he survived being an orphan in Borginia so long and pulled off the compliczated and difficult role he had to previously by shutting himself off a lot and suppressing his own reactions. Often, however, the real problem in this situation is that I don't know how to communicate something like that, or know what the reasonable terms of it are, so it's very easy for me to logically steer things towards a darker tone because that's what I'm familiar with even when I'm not trying to.
3) He does! There are a lot of reasons for this. Habit is part of it, as well as security--being shy, it's a lot easier for him to have it as a buffer between him and whoever he's talking to, allowing him a little bit of a 'shield,' so to speak. And if you've ever worn a watch or something and then forgotten to wear it one day, you'll know how naked you feel; imagine that with something that actually serves a nfunction, albeit an obtuse one. Also, he's not quite capable of letting go of everything he's been acting out for so long all at once, and the obscurity of the sunglasses is sort of like a crutch for him, socially and emotionally. I actually like to use them as a metaphor for who he is/his identity occasionally in writing.
1) Yes, the age thing was a mistake on my part. Admittedly, the error makes no difference in terms of the information, because he doesn't exactly grow much between 14 and 15, but I'll go fix that anyway.
2) You're absolutely right, and that's one thing I've always had trouble communicating... and something I really do need help with. To be honest, 'liar' Machi is the Machi from the game for the most part, but tempered a bit by experience in jail and the difficulties that come from learning who Lamiroir (and Trucy and Apollo) really are. He is, however, still... well, emotional, and while I have admittedly been limited in situations that would let me try to exercise his emotional responses in a positive light, I'm slowly trying to tackle this one at Dollsy--albeit really poorly. (It started with Anna, actually, whose situation I flailed through a lot, but he rescued Yukimi at Dollsy because Yukimi had helped him and tried to work with him previously.... this was tempered by a lot of guilt and internal conflict however, in part because of the lack of forethought that went into the decision.) And survival, to me, also seems like the sort of thing that would instinctively trump his sentiments--he survived being an orphan in Borginia so long and pulled off the compliczated and difficult role he had to previously by shutting himself off a lot and suppressing his own reactions. Often, however, the real problem in this situation is that I don't know how to communicate something like that, or know what the reasonable terms of it are, so it's very easy for me to logically steer things towards a darker tone because that's what I'm familiar with even when I'm not trying to.
3) He does! There are a lot of reasons for this. Habit is part of it, as well as security--being shy, it's a lot easier for him to have it as a buffer between him and whoever he's talking to, allowing him a little bit of a 'shield,' so to speak. And if you've ever worn a watch or something and then forgotten to wear it one day, you'll know how naked you feel; imagine that with something that actually serves a nfunction, albeit an obtuse one. Also, he's not quite capable of letting go of everything he's been acting out for so long all at once, and the obscurity of the sunglasses is sort of like a crutch for him, socially and emotionally. I actually like to use them as a metaphor for who he is/his identity occasionally in writing.
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