Fic: I Will Wait [PG]

[mach1n3]

You’re a doctor. I know. You’ve mentioned that little fact more times than I can hope to remember.

But doctors can’t always tell when it’s something about themselves that’s hurting.

That may be the reason I tend to stick around you all the time.

You’re good at what you do; heal the ills that you come across. You’ve patched me up plenty of

Comments

[kilala10]

It's so touching T^T

[mach1n3]

Many thanks. :D

[mijan]

That's really sweet. I love the thoughts, but even though the THOUGHTS could be Kirk's, the actual tone of his inner dialogue... I guess the words don't sound like him. I couldn't hear his voice in my head with this. It's almost like someone else is describing Kirk's thoughts for him. Does that make sense?

I really do like it, and it's very insightful. I guess I'm just having a hard time making myself hear Kirk with it.

(Please don't hate me for saying that.)

[mach1n3]

Criticism is always welcomed to me.

I don't hate you. I'm not very good with my inner Kirk (I sway to McCoy-centric), and this in all honesty has to be one of my first real attempts at the inner dialog.

[mijan]

I'm glad you're not angry at me! Some people hate concrit.

Do you mean a first-attempt at a KIRK inner dialogue, or a first attempt at any inner dialogue? I did a McCoy one several weeks ago, and even though I tend to *think* more like Kirk, I love McCoy's voice.

It's really awesome for a first attempt at inner dialogue for Kirk (or any inner dialogue, to be sure). The thoughts themselves worked just fine! The voice was just not quite there. Does that make sense?

[mach1n3]

First attempt at Kirk's inner dialogue, I mean.

I can understand the point you're making. May have to do some more reading/research to get it right...or just admit I'm not the best at it. Hee.

[mach1n3]

Thanks!

[weepingnaiad]

Oh, this was wonderful! I loved seeing Jim's thoughts on Bones, but I adored those last three lines... so Jim and Bones.

[mach1n3]

Thanks!

[near_family]

Awwwwwwww... ^^

I don't normally go for First Person stuff, but I liked this. I've seen a lot of fic where Bones is waiting (patiently, in his own way) for Kirk to settle. But I really like the idea of Kirk waiting for Bones.

Very sweet.

[mach1n3]

Woohoo! Any time I can get someone to enjoy something not quite their style a little angel earns its wings... Or was that something else?

Happy to hear that you enjoyed it.