Goodbye, Toma-chan.
Title: Goodbye Toma-chan.
Author: me
Pairing: Ikuta Toma and Kamenashi Kazuya
Genre: Romance (maybe)
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I own nothing but the plot.
Summary: Toma is leaving and Kazuya just went to him, to say goodbye.
Author Note: It's my first story in english, so there were many language mistakes. Gomene.
( Goodbye )
It's KEWL! :3♥
I love it when you made it seem like Toma is getting somewhat jealous Kame having a relationship with Jin, thinking that Kame might only use him. Sugoii na monogatari. ♥
The only thing about the construction of the fic, I'll give you an advice, just a friendly advice, okay? ^^;
- You can use [""] the quotation marks when it is a line of a person (e.g. "I love you," Kame said). Just like that is appropriate when writing. ^^
- Grammar can be learned, dear. ^^ Don't worry about you, not being able to write as beautiful as the others with flower words and great grammars. But I tell you, by reading, you can adapt those. :) I know you can be a great writer.
- My comment about the story, the only and main problem is just the grammar. But all in all (including the plot, the setting, the words used), it's WONDERFUL, seriously. :D I felt your character's presence with your beautiful words ♥
So thanks for writing this fic. Will cheer for you from now on. I know you can be a great writer, Mara-chan! ♥
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I know that I have a grammatic problems.
It's kills me and I don't know what should I do.
I learn it all the time, but never be good enough, and I always do stupids mistakes.
Thx for your advaice :*
I love advaice, becouse I wanna develop with my writting skills.
Thank you, dear :*
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