The Rising Storm, Chapter 1

[lytrigian]

Here's Chapter 1 of  "The Rising Storm", the introductory novella to my Tales of the Tempest series. This is sword-and-sorcery -- generally more sword than sorcery, but both are there. Like most fantasy, it's sometime violent, sometimes funny, and sometimes sexy. The sexy parts are homoerotic. I'm not comfortable with the label "yaoi" since I

Comments

[muroku]

I like the action and the masculinity in the work.
Love the humor "All the forms had these ridiculous poetic names. The one that worked best for me was “Summer Afternoon Rainstorm.”
but I'd have to read more to figure out if I like the plot.

I happen to love action/adventure and yaoi sure needs more of that so please keep sharing.

[lytrigian]

Thank you! This novella has some action, but I don't know if there's enough to call it "action-adventure" so I don't want to sell it that way even though I hope you keep reading and enjoy it. Other stories in the series will be more focused on action, but not exclusively.

I'm glad the masculinity appeals. I wanted very much to avoid stereotypes. Having said that, I have to perform a mea culpa over Kitaro's preferences, as it's probably detectable in the next chapter that he's a bottom. According to the stereotype that's what you'd expect from his stature -- so I tried to break it almost every other way.

[rorarin]

This story looks interesting and exciting so far. Also, I'm always glad to see a story with gay romance that has developed positive female characters as well. Just curious: What kind of research did you do for the martial arts content?

[lytrigian]

If you're going to have female characters at all, it's ridiculous to throw them away. I don't understand why anyone would want to. Mine will be generally sympathetic. It may be gender bias on my part. I have some trouble getting under the skin of female antagonists and I don't want to present a caricature. That may change as my writing improves

[muroku]

I think your experience with fencing really gives you an edge in your writing! It's tough for writers to capture fight scenes so well and in yaoi especially alot of "fighting" is generally emotional angst XD

It's the masculinity in your work that makes it special!

I will come back to read the rest of the chaps soon and I'll let you know what I think.

ttyl

[charisstoma]

“Do you know how beautiful you are when you do that?”
*jumps* Who said that? Where are they? Oh how could you leave it there? Evil!

[lytrigian]

Then please keep reading! I have the entire thing up in my journal, one chapter per entry. I only linked to the first chapter at the_originals because I'm linking chapter-by-chapter elsewhere and didn't want to be too spammy.

[lytrigian]

Thank you!

interesting

[willterrytragic]

you are a good writer

Re: interesting

[lytrigian]

Thank you. I try -- although when I look at it now there are a lot of things that need fixing, and parts of it I was never satisfied with in the first place. I'm sure if I were critiquing it, I wouldn't be terribly kind.