fic: I couldn't save your life tonight

[hackysack01]

Title: I couldn't save your life tonight

Rating: pg-13

Summary: Reid's death, but mildly more medically accurate.

Warnings: depressing.

A/n: inspired by last week's FunFicFriday prompt: "someone saved my life tonight," even though it's the complete opposite of the prompt, and there's nothing "fun" about it.

A bit off-canon: Holden is somehow there with

Comments

[anasjo]

OMG, this is so heartbreaking. At least Holden was there for Luke.

[hackysack01]

Yeah, i can't believe he was left by himself while Reid was dying, although i have no idea why I put Holden - of all people - there with him, I don't think he even had any interaction with Luke during this entire storyline lol.
Thanks for commenting, and sorry for the depressing content.

[dpracket]

Wah. NO

[hackysack01]

Thank you for your comments; my apologies for the depressing content although I'm right there with ya on the denial train.

"There should have been wailing and gnashing of teeth. Oh, wait, that was me in front of my tv. LOL."
LOL love it!

I couldn't agree more with you and kccalgal, that storyline was an absolute shambles from start to finish. And don't get me started on the type of doctor who treats a viral infection with antibiotics!! Damn that dimply paediatrician.

It was ridiculous how Bob&co were so worried about Luke seeing Reid being brought in, but once Luke knew, everyone disappeared on him. Although I honestly couldn't tell you why it was Holden who was comforting Luke - I don't think they interacted at all during that storyline!

[kccalgal]

So occasionally I will revisit the crap that was Canon but I always stop before the stupid train. I could have even gone for the story outline they had, but good golly Miss Molly the execution was horrendous. Heart donors are brain dead with a perfectly functioning heart not someone that orally gives his power of attorney to Luke then immediately flat lines. ARRRRRGGGH

Anyway, what I really liked about your fic is the emotion you give Luke. You can really feel his agony as you read. This was so sad.

[dpracket]

Right? He was lucid and then dead immediately afterwards. And the whole train thing wad so stupid! Let's make it seem that seatbelts are not good idea cuz Ya never know when they might lock up on you. And three year olds can undo them, but a neurosurgeon can't? And don't even get me started on the fact that Reid took on a train and was even conscious. He would have been mangled and in shock, if alive at all.

[kccalgal]

As big of a Lure fan as I am, I did actually laugh out loud at the entire train sequence. As Reid tried to go across the tracks his car immediately dies. He was speeding anyway but no momentum could take him across. He ended up nearly parallel to the tracks and battled both trying to start the car and his seatbelt while the train neared and he still couldn't escape? Uh huh, sure, totally believable.

[hackysack01]

I agree, this had to be the worst way of executing that storyline, I know the show was ending but come on!
Thank you for that very flattering feedback, it was so hard to get into Luke's head without wanting to take a razor blade to my wrists.
This about covers it I suppose:

[amyafa]

So sad. But very posible.

Not in my imagination dough.

[hackysack01]

Thank you, I'm in denial too, thank god for all the fic in this comm!

[lure007]

:(

As painful as post-train fics are to read, yours was infinitesimally better than the cold-hearted/devoid-of-any-emotion crap they showed on TV.

So, thanks.

[hackysack01]

Ouch!
But thank you for your feedback, i suppose you mean that milking Luke's pain was done with too much relish?

[lure007]

That, too. *sigh*

The prevalent feeling that has stayed with me, though, is one of sheer disbelief at how the other characters acted throughout/just after that gut-wrenching-moment-that-never-happened. Or, rather, didn't act.

I remember simply staring at my screen when they started showing those sequences, uncomprehending. It honestly felt so OOC for the likes of Bob, Katie, etc. to barely portray any real emotion at Reid's death. There was, of course, so much more wrong with that entire story arc but the way his death was brushed aside made it feel like it was a mere plot point to facilitate *insert sarcasm here* Oakdale's sweetheart/Doogie Hughes' happily ever after. Ugh.

I really tend to ignore all of that as canon because, otherwise, hardly any of the other secondary characters would make an appearance in my fics.

[lure007]

Oh, crap. That was supposed to read infinitely better - sorry about that! I was posting on my phone earlier and the automated spell-checker thing messed up without me noticing.

Your response makes so much more sense now. *head-desk*

Rest assured, what I meant to say was that your version is so, so much better! :)

PS: also, I assumed what you said about Luke's pain was in reference to the show, NOT your fic. My first response to your comment is built around that... sorry about this mess!